Right, I suppose it's time to hand in my homework, Ms K66 . I'm a bit rusty at the whole writing gambit, so have some mercy.
Lesson One: He stared at the window blankly, watching the thunderstorm rage as droplets of rain rolled down lazily, dripping off the bottom of the sill outside. Red and golden leaves swirled around the house in eddies of wind before coming to rest on the ground, disfiguring the immaculately maintained estate. It was as cold inside as out - the hearths were not lit, the fires did not roar - no, there was not even a single candle lighting the drawing room or, indeed, the house, and the grim autumn day did aught to buoy his spirits. Without her, the house felt empty, devoid of life -- there was no reason to oust the darkness mustering within.
She had been missing too long, and he was afraid.
Lesson Two: Name: [redacted]
Age: 42 Appearance: Taller than most, [redacted] stood at 6'4" with relatively short, steel-grey hair, and a well-groomed, dignified moustache and beard and would have been considered handsome, once upon a time, and still might be by some, but stress and worry had gotten to him over the years, and more than anything, he looked weary. With well-defined, prominent cheekbones, a strong-set jaw, and a proud nose, he looked every part the stately nobleman he professes to be. His dark blue eyes were filled with a solemn and calculative contemplation of everything around him. He had the lean and muscular body of a great swordsman not long out of his prime, and his movements showed it - they are graceful, yet dignified, confident and determined. Personality: Contemplative, just and decisive all at once, [redacted] was not known for being a timid man. His reputation as a shrewd businessman, elegant politician and charismatic leader were all earned in their own right, and it was in [redacted]'s nature to strive towards these exemplars. He lived a morally virtuous life when he could, but was not unwilling to compromise to do what was necessary for a given situation, if that result was the best he could ascertain. He was also unafraid to get his hands dirty and employed a lead-from-the-front strategy which helped build his renown on the battlefield.
Lesson Three: [redacted] has formed relationships with many over the years, especially in his position as the chancellor of an influential city-state.
His wife - [redacted] came to meet his wife when purchasing clothes from her. Neither of them particularly young, they quickly bonded through a series of unexpected circumstances. He cared for his wife deeply, and they had a loving relationship, although the demands of his role prevented him from devoting as much time to her as he would like.
The wards - [redacted] and his wife adopted her sister's two children after the sister and her husband were caught up in a civil war. To begin with, there was a mutual wariness between the children and him, but they have grown to respect him as a father figure, albeit not as their father.
His Empress - As a democratic politician, [redacted] resented the leader of the nation he lived in for her ideology of inequality, and autocratic, dictatorial leadership. He actively sought opportunities to depose her.
His parents - were smashed in a tidal wave, along with the rest of his home city. This led [redacted] on a path to find his new place in the world after the last one was ripped out from beneath him. He missed them deeply and kept whatever scraps of his youth he could find to remind him of them.
Sorry for the redactions, but a man has his secrets. I hope you don't mind.
Thanks for the great thread K66, keep it up!
Hi, Helios.
New to writing, you say? That was a great short story right there. You did amazing in grabbing the reader's attention. I definitely want to know more. Will you put a book out sometime?
Great details on the personality. You gave a great description, and it was well laid out. I must say, you have me kinda interested. I also felt like I heard that type of appearance (somewhat) from a book... Oh well. Either way, that doesn't really matter.
Those are amazing relationships. I love how you added a bit of a small back story behind each one how he is/was affected by it. The way he met his wife makes me think you've read The Memory Keeper's Daughter. Have you by any chance?
Right, I suppose it's time to hand in my homework, Ms K66 . I'm a bit rusty at the whole writing gambit, so have some mercy.
Lesson One: He stared at the window blankly, watching the thunderstorm rage as droplets of rain rolled down lazily, dripping off the bottom of the sill outside. Red and golden leaves swirled around the house in eddies of wind before coming to rest on the ground, disfiguring the immaculately maintained estate. It was as cold inside as out - the hearths were not lit, the fires did not roar - no, there was not even a single candle lighting the drawing room or, indeed, the house, and the grim autumn day did aught to buoy his spirits. Without her, the house felt empty, devoid of life -- there was no reason to oust the darkness mustering within.
She had been missing too long, and he was afraid.
Lesson Two: Name: [redacted]
Age: 42 Appearance: Taller than most, [redacted] stood at 6'4" with relatively short, steel-grey hair, and a well-groomed, dignified moustache and beard and would have been considered handsome, once upon a time, and still might be by some, but stress and worry had gotten to him over the years, and more than anything, he looked weary. With well-defined, prominent cheekbones, a strong-set jaw, and a proud nose, he looked every part the stately nobleman he professes to be. His dark blue eyes were filled with a solemn and calculative contemplation of everything around him. He had the lean and muscular body of a great swordsman not long out of his prime, and his movements showed it - they are graceful, yet dignified, confident and determined. Personality: Contemplative, just and decisive all at once, [redacted] was not known for being a timid man. His reputation as a shrewd businessman, elegant politician and charismatic leader were all earned in their own right, and it was in [redacted]'s nature to strive towards these exemplars. He lived a morally virtuous life when he could, but was not unwilling to compromise to do what was necessary for a given situation, if that result was the best he could ascertain. He was also unafraid to get his hands dirty and employed a lead-from-the-front strategy which helped build his renown on the battlefield.
Lesson Three: [redacted] has formed relationships with many over the years, especially in his position as the chancellor of an influential city-state.
His wife - [redacted] came to meet his wife when purchasing clothes from her. Neither of them particularly young, they quickly bonded through a series of unexpected circumstances. He cared for his wife deeply, and they had a loving relationship, although the demands of his role prevented him from devoting as much time to her as he would like.
The wards - [redacted] and his wife adopted her sister's two children after the sister and her husband were caught up in a civil war. To begin with, there was a mutual wariness between the children and him, but they have grown to respect him as a father figure, albeit not as their father.
His Empress - As a democratic politician, [redacted] resented the leader of the nation he lived in for her ideology of inequality, and autocratic, dictatorial leadership. He actively sought opportunities to depose her.
His parents - were smashed in a tidal wave, along with the rest of his home city. This led [redacted] on a path to find his new place in the world after the last one was ripped out from beneath him. He missed them deeply and kept whatever scraps of his youth he could find to remind him of them.
Sorry for the redactions, but a man has his secrets. I hope you don't mind.
Thanks for the great thread K66, keep it up!
Hi, Helios.
New to writing, you say? That was a great short story right there. You did amazing in grabbing the reader's attention. I definitely want to know more. Will you put a book out sometime?
Great details on the personality. You gave a great description, and it was well laid out. I must say, you have me kinda interested. I also felt like I heard that type of appearance (somewhat) from a book... Oh well. Either way, that doesn't really matter.
Those are amazing relationships. I love how you added a bit of a small back story behind each one how he is/was affected by it. The way he met his wife makes me think you've read The Memory Keeper's Daughter. Have you by any chance?
I can't believe I just "graded" the new Admin.
I wouldn't worry too much if I were you, I'd say I'll be getting a fair bit of assessing as long as I'm the head administrator.
I'm not quite new to writing, but I haven't done any story writing in a little while which is why I said I'm a little bit rusty. I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it though - thank you for your kind words!
I promise I'm not a plagarist. I did write all that myself, I promise. And now, I haven't read The Memory Keeper's Daughter - that all developed from RP (which, by the by, is why I've redacted various things. ). I've always liked the story, though.
New to writing, you say? That was a great short story right there. You did amazing in grabbing the reader's attention. I definitely want to know more. Will you put a book out sometime?
Great details on the personality. You gave a great description, and it was well laid out. I must say, you have me kinda interested. I also felt like I heard that type of appearance (somewhat) from a book... Oh well. Either way, that doesn't really matter.
Those are amazing relationships. I love how you added a bit of a small back story behind each one how he is/was affected by it. The way he met his wife makes me think you've read The Memory Keeper's Daughter. Have you by any chance?
I can't believe I just "graded" the new Admin.
I wouldn't worry too much if I were you, I'd say I'll be getting a fair bit of assessing as long as I'm the head administrator.
I'm not quite new to writing, but I haven't done any story writing in a little while which is why I said I'm a little bit rusty. I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it though - thank you for your kind words!
I promise I'm not a plagarist. I did write all that myself, I promise. And now, I haven't read The Memory Keeper's Daughter - that all developed from RP (which, by the by, is why I've redacted various things. ). I've always liked the story, though.
Ooh ugh, if I do Zephyr how am I going to do this without major spoilers?
I guess I'll show everything that is known so far. ( even though there's a lot more to it that hasn't happened in the story yet I'm not telling you. )
So I'm doing my character Zephyr.
Spoilers for Gravitation if you haven't read it. But if you have, it explains what you already know a little better hopefully.
Mother and father: respects and loves them as parents.
Aunt, uncle, grandma and grandpa: respects and loves them as the other adults in her life, not quite as close as parents but very close.
Siblings: loves them as siblings.
Cousins: Treats and loves them like siblings.
Other grandpa and grandma: Has never met them, and doesn't even know if they are even alive. Plus she knows nothing about them.
Uncle Gravis: Never met him, but knows he was an elemental master. ( He is known to be smashed though. )
Keegan, Brent, Brent's daughters and their friends, and Dearth: She considers them all as distant friends or close aquntecnes.
Lloyd: known as Sensei to Zephyr, she respects him and listens to him even though he hasn't fully gained her trust. ( plus he has not yet revealed his true identity to her for his own reasons. )
Alpha's pack: Although not knowing of them exactly, she does know they are after her and her family. And does not like them.
Great relationships.
For the record, I don't think it spoils anything major, for I am still clueless about your story that I need to read. I should get round to doing that at some point.
Thanks! I'm glad that you're interested, I hope you enjoy it when/ if you do read it.
For the record, I don't think it spoils anything major, for I am still clueless about your story that I need to read. I should get round to doing that at some point.
Thanks! I'm glad that you're interested, I hope you enjoy it when/ if you do read it.
I have it bookmarked and I've been liking the posts of your chapter, I just need to read it. I think I'll plan to start it tomorrow.
Thanks! I'm glad that you're interested, I hope you enjoy it when/ if you do read it.
I have it bookmarked and I've been liking the posts of your chapter, I just need to read it. I think I'll plan to start it tomorrow.
Great. And here, not sure if you need this or not, but if you want to find each part easy.
Prologue - Page 1 Chapter 1 Jungle Living Part 1 - Page 1 Chapter 1 Jungle Living Part 2- Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 1 - Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 2 - Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 3 - Page 1 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 1 - Page 2 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 2 - Page 4 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 3 - Page 5 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 1 - Page 10 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 2 - Page 12 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 3 - Page 20 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 4 - Page 21 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 1 - Page 22 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 2 -Page 23 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 3 - Page 23 Chapter 6 Legacy of Gravity Part 1- Page 23
I have it bookmarked and I've been liking the posts of your chapter, I just need to read it. I think I'll plan to start it tomorrow.
Great. And here, not sure if you need this or not, but if you want to find each part easy.
Prologue - Page 1 Chapter 1 Jungle Living Part 1 - Page 1 Chapter 1 Jungle Living Part 2- Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 1 - Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 2 - Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 3 - Page 1 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 1 - Page 2 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 2 - Page 4 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 3 - Page 5 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 1 - Page 10 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 2 - Page 12 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 3 - Page 20 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 4 - Page 21 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 1 - Page 22 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 2 -Page 23 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 3 - Page 23 Chapter 6 Legacy of Gravity Part 1- Page 23
Great. And here, not sure if you need this or not, but if you want to find each part easy.
Prologue - Page 1 Chapter 1 Jungle Living Part 1 - Page 1 Chapter 1 Jungle Living Part 2- Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 1 - Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 2 - Page 1 Chapter 2 Jungle Storms Part 3 - Page 1 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 1 - Page 2 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 2 - Page 4 Chapter 3 Den of Storms Part 3 - Page 5 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 1 - Page 10 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 2 - Page 12 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 3 - Page 20 Chapter 4 Wolf Vision Part 4 - Page 21 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 1 - Page 22 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 2 -Page 23 Chapter 5 Heart of An Outsider Part 3 - Page 23 Chapter 6 Legacy of Gravity Part 1- Page 23
Yeah that's sort of how I put it... Here, does this help you visualize?
That is Zephyr? Your art is really good, I can't draw LEGO Minifigures, only stickmen.
Yep, the very first drawing I did of her I think. Thanks! It takes practice, and the legs aren't easy. But if you practice drawing minifigures enough it gets easier.
That is Zephyr? Your art is really good, I can't draw LEGO Minifigures, only stickmen.
Yep, the very first drawing I did of her I think. Thanks! It takes practice, and the legs aren't easy. But if you practice drawing minifigures enough it gets easier.
Laura/Mother - Lucas looked up to his mother as a child, but was robbed of her at the age of twelve
Ellie/Sister- She's one of the only people who keeps him going through his depression. She always seems to be there when he's in desperate need of help.
Katie/GF - Another person who keeps him going, she's been his best friend since childhood and is now his girlfriend. Though she finds it hard a lot of the time because she hates to see him suffer.
Current enemies:
Xavier Black: Crime Lord that controls Vertigo City. Lucas used to run with his gang which landed him in Hellblaze penitentiary (Won't spoil too much :3).
Richard/father - Left his family when Lucas was eight, Lucas hates him with all his being, because he see's that it's his fault that his mother died, because he wasn't there to protect them.
It - The name he gave the "thing" that killed his mother.
Yep, the very first drawing I did of her I think. Thanks! It takes practice, and the legs aren't easy. But if you practice drawing minifigures enough it gets easier.
Oh well. Either way, that doesn't really matter. 
Thank you so much!!! 
