theteenlegotitan , what do you think of this new chapter i made?


    After a few hours, Nya found Kai and me on the floor, then we both awoken to see her face. “Hey sleepyheads, wake up… Fangtom and Skalidor need audience with Ryen and you.” Nya then walked away and Kai scratched his head and groaned. “Ach… Hey Ryen, what do they need with-” I interrupted Kai for a bland answer. “Some trial or slither-pit match… heck, I and Jay went through one, and I won’t wanna be in that situation ever again.” I growled, getting up and grumpily walked upstairs back onto the bounty’s deck. We saw the generals waiting for us, they gestured us to come speak to them; in private. Therefore, they both slithered upstairs on the deck and into the dining room, Kai and me following.

    In said dining room, we sat with a few of their men next to the generals, guarding. Skalidor and Fangtom looked at each other and at us with an eye that seems to be somewhat grave…

    “Men, it has come to usssss that, due to this young man’ssssss recent action of… well, rebellion against hissssss own kin of the tribes he technically belongssss to. We will go ahead and break away from their pact that Ssssskalesssss and Accccidicussss formed with us, but due to recent observations, it sssssseems that remaining Anacondrai Pythor is seemingly trying to pull the ssssstrings from behind stage and awaken The Great Devourer.” Skalidor said bluntly, I slammed my fist on the table and hissed in anger.

    “AUGH!!!! That… that purple scaled invisible FREAK!!!! I hate him with every ounce and milliliter of my venom and blood! He rubs me the wrong way, I KNOW he is up to something evil! And he can’t hide it ever from ME!!!” I said, growling, rubbing my fist to ease it’s pain since it hurt, it seemingly left an imprint on the table. Guess my father’s strength is flowing in me more than I ever can imagine.

    “Mr. Ssssoto… I never-““-Knew you had sssssuch bad-““-Blood with Pythor before, yesssss?” General Fangtom said in his broken speech-pattern. He looked puzzled as if I met him before Lloyd managed to open the tomb when he was young.

    “Anyways, we’re hoping for you two to guard our fang-blades; sure I already have mine, so we’ll keep them away from Pythor, ssssssuch a conniving ssssscoundrel! He’ll never get these precioussssss blades of legend… even if we might use it against his planssssss!” General Skalidor said, growling…

    “uuugh… that fool… H-how dare him…” I murmured, not heard from anyone. I growled and gripped my claws into the table, more anger rising up in me…

    “Oh and there’s one thing from us to you, Kai… your ‘daughter’ of sorts… we need her to go along with Ryen…” General Skalidor said, grinning somewhat evilly, General Fangtom chuckling as well…

    “What? Fangcrusha and Ryen? Uh… i-is that fine with you?” Kai asked me, I grunted and nodded yes. I actually want Fangcrusha by my side whenever I can… it was due to that little ‘thing’ we had back at the end of chapter 5.5, but hey, what can I say?

    “Well Kai and Misssster-“ “-Sssooto, well, you’ll have to-“ “-Find our Fang-Blade… apparently…” Fangtom said, I grunted and grinned.

    “Consider it done and out of the way general… We Hybrids will get that blade of yours! Just leave it to us and we’ll call it a day… if everything can go as planned, that is.” I said, having a bit of doubt within. All because of Pythor, Acidicus and Skales… how much evil can we ninja get around here!?

    Our negotiations were going well, until a sudden girly scream from Jay happened to wake our senses, Kai and me rushed out of the room with Skalidor and Fangtom looking a bit confused. Just as we arrived on the main deck, we saw a bunch of Fangpyres surround something. Jay came running up to us, him freaking out.

    “KAI!!! KAI!!! YOUR ‘DUAGHTER’ TRANSFORMED YOUR BLADE CYCLE, INTO A SERPENTINE VEHICLE!!! And, I hate to say this buuuut, YOU’RE A BAD PARENT!!!” He shouted, shaking Kai silly. I grumbled and looked un-impressed, until the Fangpyres cleared out to allow us to see the Transformed Blade-Cycle, and Kai and me gasped.

Fangcrusha was lying on the turned vehicle, her looking proud at what she did, she gasped, jumped off the vehicle, and skipped merrily to her father, laughing. “Oooh! Daddy, daddy~! Guess what I did to your blade-cycle, isn’t it beautiful~!?” She said, hugging Kai and pushing him towards the transformed golden-weapon-vehicle. Kai speechless, me looking… somewhat impressed at the cool-looking vehicle, just my style I guess.


    It was like a standard Serpentine Motor-Bike, but had the look of Kai’s Blade Cycle and with cool-ivory blades that had this fan sprawled out to make the vehicle seem even more reptilian. Kinda like the Great Devourer’s fans. It’s paintjob was this greenish-red scale substance and it had literal flaming eyes and stared at Kai with an intense burning gaze, and it had a pretty long tail which was also lit on fire as well, which is just plain epic and intense! Man, now I wish Fangcrusha could turn my vehicle into that cool of a road-hog- eerrr… I mean, Road… Serpent? I dunno what you would call it but I would like to call this newly re-designed golden weapon vehicle, the “Scale Burner” or something along those lines.


    “M-my… B-bike… I-is i-it s-staring a-at m-me!?” Kai stuttered, him looking VERY freaked out. I rolled my eyes again and walked over to it. Its blazing eyes turned to me and suddenly it breathed fire in my direction suddenly, startling everyone.

    “Woah! Jeez, take a cool breath mint!” I said, making my cheesy one-liners like my father before me. “Take a chill-pill why don’t ya!?” Jay added, slapping the scaled hood to back it off my case, the Scale Burner bike hissed back and breathed more flames at me, this time scortching Jay’s face. I laughed at him for that event…

    “FFFAAANNNGCRUUUSSSHHHAAA!!!!!!” Kai yelled in annoyance, Fangcrusha getting scared and backing away suddenly. I scowled and thought about the newly created vehicle, thinking ‘Fangcrusha must have bitten the Golden Katana of Flames… but… its powers… can it be... corrupted?’ I thought. Thinking how this must’ve happened, and whether she did it on purpose or accident.

    Fangcrusha then ran over to the bike and whispered something to it. The bike responded and it began to glow this weird gold-green color and WHAZAM!!! It just appeared to transform back into its Golden Katana form, it retaining its greenish-goldish glow on it, the metal looking the same. She had looked a bit sorry and handed it back to Kai, He shuddered when he felt the reptilian-like handle on it, it had a little extension of a organic tail morphing from the in-organic metal and leather handle, which was also covered in the scaled texture.


    “I-I’m sorry daddy… i-I w-wanted the S-Sword and Vehicle to look more uhh… appealing to my kin! I-I am really sorry daddy! I-I’m sorry I had to d-do this to you!” she said, looking very displeased with herself, Kai shoved the sword back into Fangcrusha’s hands and groaned… looking at her dismally.

    “…N-no… you have i-it back! Y-you’ve… you’ve seem t-to know a bit more about my weapons’ powers than I could have handled it… well… no offense to you, my sweet daughter.” He said, looking a bit happy. “You’ve learned so much from me, a-and you earned the respect of all my friends and Sensei too.” Kai continued, feeling awkward… I groaned and walked away, some Fangpyres following me.


    One of them slowed me down to chat. “Sssssso, Mr. Sssoto, it ssssemmsss like your busddysss have warmed up to ussss? Alssssso, never knew there wassss another Sssserpentine hybrid here… Sssheeesss beautiful…” He said feeling interested in Fangcrusha’s appearance. I growled out of sheer jealousy and slammed him on the floor, pinning him down.

    “Get your fangs off of my girl! She is the only one whom I have to love in this entire world, and I am not letting any other Serpentine take her away from me! It is a wonder General Fangtom and General Skalidor does not despise her as much as Acidicus and Skales do to me! They do not understand me as much as your General and Skalidor do! And they understand how awkward it are to be two types of Serpentine at once!” I said, hissing at the Fangpyre soldier to stop becoming interested in Fangcrusha.


    “Wasssss it sssomthing i-I ssssaid!? I-I mean n-no h-harm to her!” The solder pleaded in fear, I frowned and roared in his face, grabbing him by the legs and throwing him back into the crowd of Fangpyres on the Bounty’s main deck. I would grumpily walk back into the room that Fangtom, Skalidor held them up in and I slammed my hand on the table to get their attention.

    “Wheres your Fang-blade, Fangtom!? I got to get Fangcrusha off of this ship due to various personal reasons!” I shouted aggressively, The Fangpyre general looking a bit peeved. He chuckled and looked calm.

    “Oh Mr. Sssoto-“ “-How are you going to-“ “-Be more calmer when-“ “-The time comessss, yesss?” Fangtom’s heads said, I growled and sighed…

    “Y-yes… G-general… I-I will become a lot… calmer…” I said, feeling calm already, no meditation required!

I'd honestly think you'd would make Fangcrusha as a character if this went on for long enough in the ole LMB's as a love interest for Ryen, and i'd implemented that just for you! Also, you said you were done drawing concept art for Fangcrusha? and i'd would SO love if you were to Co-write with me again! 

Yeah, i had the feeling you'd create Fangcrusha. Howsabout you do the next chapter, chapter 6.5 for me?