Do you need help? No, I'd say most of them give feedback. There just aren't many of them, and there were fewer when I was still posting chapters.
Maybe in a minute.XD That's good, that's not great, and that's sortta depressing. With a story of this calibur, you'd think the LMBE comunity would be well-versed in quotes and the like from it.
"Wise words by wise men write wise deeds in wise pen." —Lollimon the Wise
Do you need help? No, I'd say most of them give feedback. There just aren't many of them, and there were fewer when I was still posting chapters.
Maybe in a minute.XD That's good, that's not great, and that's sortta depressing. With a story of this calibur, you'd think the LMBE comunity would be well-versed in quotes and the like from it.
It's just because we're tucked away on a dormant forum. You've read it/are reading it then? I wasn't sure if you were reading, or just followed Con here.
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Post by RuleJJ on Nov 17, 2018 0:50:28 GMT
Frightful Riders (Part Two of Seven)
Volkmar: The rider of Strike, Volkmar was second only to Mavros among Kelrin’s warriors. He never was as ambitious or intelligent as his rival, however. Nonetheless, Volkmar was chosen to receive the second dragon egg. Unfortunately for Volkmar, his dragon was the smallest and weakest of the lot. Volkmar was cruel to him, and constantly abusive. During the War, Volkmar and Strike were sent to the forest, where they helped to destroy the forest men, and were smashed in the battle against the elves. As a result of their bond, Volkmar and Strike were mentally linked, but Volkmar refused to use that link due to Strike’s weakness.
Strike: Ridden by Volkmar, Strike hatched form the second egg that Kelrin found. Strike was a very small and physically weak dragon, with green scales and a toxic vapor breath weapon. Despite Volkmar’s abuses, Strike, like all of Kelrin’s dragons, was very loyal to his rider. Volkmar and Strike were sent to the forest to lead the invasion force there, and, after smashing all of the forest men, were smashed by the elves.
Voin: The rider of Thymos, Voin was the only dwarven member of Kelrin’s riders and an effective warrior. Voin was known for his terrible temper, and many in Kelrin’s army took care to avoid him. This temper did prove effective, however, in training the hatchling Thymos, who had hatched during the raid on the den. Voin was able to turn his anger instead to Kelrin’s enemies. During the battle, Voin and Thymos helped in the attack on the Dwarven Citadel, where they were smashed by Skrag and Zargan.
Thymos: Ridden by Voin, Thymos hatched from his egg during the raid on the den, and the sounds he made allowed Kelrin’s men to find four of the five hidden eggs. For a long time, Thymos was furious at Kelrin’s men for taking him, but Voin was able to turn that anger against Kelrin’s enemies. Among the stronger of Kelrin’s dragons, Thymos had red and black scales and breathed fire. At the Dwarven Citadel, Skrag knocked Voin out of his saddle, and Thymos was smashed trying to save him.
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Post by RuleJJ on Nov 17, 2018 14:32:18 GMT
Frightful Riders (Part Three of Seven)
Pursigon: The rider of Fovos, Pursigon was among the strongest warriors in Kelrin’s army, and a competent leader of men. Pursigon was chosen for the third dragon to reward his successes and to keep the already-hatched Fovos in check. He controlled her through fear, using the trauma she experienced during her capture as a tool. In turn, he was made loyal to Kelrin through his fear of what the man would do to him if he was not. For this reason, he was kept close to Kelrin as a personal bodyguard, only brought into the battle when Kelrin joined it himself. There, he and Fovos badly injured Hithrol and Olifin, who they later believed responsible for the smashing of Arrana and Sichasia, before being captured by Skrag and Zargan.
Fovos: Ridden by Pursigon, Fovos was newly hatched when she and three of her brood mates were captured by Kelrin’s army and was forced to watch from her hiding place as her brood mother was smashed by their hired dragonslayer. This event traumatized her, and she attempted on many occasions to run away before Pusigon fully subdued her. Below average size for a dragon, Fovos’s scales were yellow and purple, and she breathed acid. She was among the weakest of Kelrin’s dragons, largely because of her constant fear. She and Pursigon were kept close to Kelrin, until he took them to join the battle at the Falkon castle. There, they badly injured Hithrol and Olifin before they were captured by Skrag and Zargan.
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Post by RuleJJ on Nov 18, 2018 13:53:42 GMT
Frightful Riders (Part Four of Seven)
Gorvechev: The rider of Ponos, Gorvechev was known among Kelrin’s army for his enjoyment of causing pain, uncaring for anyone or anything. He was given Ponos’s egg because Kelrin thought he would be quite capable of controlling a dragon. Gorvechev was excited to have a dragon with which and on which to inflict pain, and one of his first actions was grafting a spiked helmet to her skull as an experiment, which put her in constant pain. Soon, however, something unexpected began to happen. Gorvechev began to feel affection for his dragon. He tried to free her from the mask of pain but was unable to, a failure that haunted him for the rest of his life. During the battle, Gorvechev and Ponos were sent to the forest to fight the forest men and elves. When the power-hungry Jon turned on them, and Ponos was smashed, Gorvechev hunted down and smashed Potestas before being smashed in a duel with Jon. Gorvechev and Ponos were able to communicate mentally as a result of their bond.
Ponos: Ridden by Gorvechev, Ponos hatched from the third of four eggs taken from the den. She was in constant pain due to the mask Gorvechev had grafted to her skull, but eventually came to forgive him. Ponos was strong and large, with silver and green scales, and a powerful sonic cry. While in battle against the elves, Ponos was smashed by Jon, and left for Potestas.
That'd be awesome. Classrooms should have this on their shelves.
Yas. RuleJJ, send this to a publishing agent.
I don't know about that. For me, the story as it is just isn't at a point where I'm satisfied with it enough to consider publishing. To do that, I'd have to make a lot of improvements, including rebuilding the world from the ground up.