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Post by Epl317 on Nov 22, 2018 2:26:13 GMT
I've never made a Ninjago story before. I've had quite a few ideas and I thought a story about the First Spinjitzu Master would be a good start. It's about something that already has a beginning, middle, and end, so I don't need to worry about where it's going I'll just need to worry about the millions of plot holes. This will just be the prologue, so here goes:
One day, in the realm in which two species thrived, the chief of the Oni, a dark and twisted species of demon, the incarnation of evil, gave orders to his followers that whatever the Dragons, the incarnations of light, created with there powers of creation, the Oni must use there powers of destruction to twice their potential in order to make sure the Dragons didn't effect their world in any way. Up to that day, half the realm was pure beauty. There were trees, lakes, gardens full of flowers. There was everything anyone needed to be happy. There was light. You can guess who lived here. However, the other half of the realm was dark. There was nothing. No trees. No lakes. No gardens or flowers. No beauty.
Some say there was a flower in the light half, a flower brighter than the Sun. It was the most beautiful sight anyone has ever seen. It was created by the Firstbourne dragon, created to represent all Dragons. However, the Oni had a black hole. A black whole darker than the furthest depths of space. They say no one could even look at the black whole without being corrupted beyond imagination. This was created by itself. It created itself to balance out the overwhelming light from the Dragons' flower. One may think the black hole would be unnecessary, however, the light from the flower would have burned the entire realm. The black hole had to create balance. However, no one could see this. The Dragons saw it as unnecessary, created for the Oni's own selfish will, and the Oni saw it as a chance to get rid of the light completely. They wanted to take it's power to destroy the flower of light. The confusion brought a war. No side could understand the other. No one saw the need for both, until the chief of the Oni made that one fateful order.....
I'm running out of characters, so tell me what you think!
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Post by LordTigress on Nov 22, 2018 16:29:38 GMT
I've never made a Ninjago story before. I've had quite a few ideas and I thought a story about the First Spinjitzu Master would be a good start. It's about something that already has a beginning, middle, and end, so I don't need to worry about where it's going I'll just need to worry about the millions of plot holes. This will just be the prologue, so here goes: One day, in the realm in which two species thrived, the chief of the Oni, a dark and twisted species of demon, the incarnation of evil, gave orders to his followers that whatever the Dragons, the incarnations of light, created with there powers of creation, the Oni must use there powers of destruction to twice their potential in order to make sure the Dragons didn't effect their world in any way. Up to that day, half the realm was pure beauty. There were trees, lakes, gardens full of flowers. There was everything anyone needed to be happy. There was light. You can guess who lived here. However, the other half of the realm was dark. There was nothing. No trees. No lakes. No gardens or flowers. No beauty. Some say there was a flower in the light half, a flower brighter than the Sun. It was the most beautiful sight anyone has ever seen. It was created by the Firstbourne dragon, created to represent all Dragons. However, the Oni had a black hole. A black whole darker than the furthest depths of space. They say no one could even look at the black whole without being corrupted beyond imagination. This was created by itself. It created itself to balance out the overwhelming light from the Dragons' flower. One may think the black hole would be unnecessary, however, the light from the flower would have burned the entire realm. The black hole had to create balance. However, no one could see this. The Dragons saw it as unnecessary, created for the Oni's own selfish will, and the Oni saw it as a chance to get rid of the light completely. They wanted to take it's power to destroy the flower of light. The confusion brought a war. No side could understand the other. No one saw the need for both, until the chief of the Oni made that one fateful order..... I'm running out of characters, so tell me what you think! Wow, what an intriguing beginning! You really have a talent for storytelling! I love the way you describe the world and the warring forces -- it's like I'm reading from an ancient scroll telling of enigmatic events long past. . .
Very well-done. I'm quite interested to see where this'll go.
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Post by Epl317 on Nov 22, 2018 19:51:53 GMT
I've never made a Ninjago story before. I've had quite a few ideas and I thought a story about the First Spinjitzu Master would be a good start. It's about something that already has a beginning, middle, and end, so I don't need to worry about where it's going I'll just need to worry about the millions of plot holes. This will just be the prologue, so here goes: One day, in the realm in which two species thrived, the chief of the Oni, a dark and twisted species of demon, the incarnation of evil, gave orders to his followers that whatever the Dragons, the incarnations of light, created with there powers of creation, the Oni must use there powers of destruction to twice their potential in order to make sure the Dragons didn't effect their world in any way. Up to that day, half the realm was pure beauty. There were trees, lakes, gardens full of flowers. There was everything anyone needed to be happy. There was light. You can guess who lived here. However, the other half of the realm was dark. There was nothing. No trees. No lakes. No gardens or flowers. No beauty. Some say there was a flower in the light half, a flower brighter than the Sun. It was the most beautiful sight anyone has ever seen. It was created by the Firstbourne dragon, created to represent all Dragons. However, the Oni had a black hole. A black whole darker than the furthest depths of space. They say no one could even look at the black whole without being corrupted beyond imagination. This was created by itself. It created itself to balance out the overwhelming light from the Dragons' flower. One may think the black hole would be unnecessary, however, the light from the flower would have burned the entire realm. The black hole had to create balance. However, no one could see this. The Dragons saw it as unnecessary, created for the Oni's own selfish will, and the Oni saw it as a chance to get rid of the light completely. They wanted to take it's power to destroy the flower of light. The confusion brought a war. No side could understand the other. No one saw the need for both, until the chief of the Oni made that one fateful order..... I'm running out of characters, so tell me what you think! Wow, what an intriguing beginning! You really have a talent for storytelling! I love the way you describe the world and the warring forces -- it's like I'm reading from an ancient scroll telling of enigmatic events long past. . .
Very well-done. I'm quite interested to see where this'll go. Thanks! I've always enjoyed descriptive storytelling, so I tried to go for that in this story. I'll release the chapters weekly (since this was the prologue I'll post the first chapter on Saturday, then it'll be weekly).
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Post by LordTigress on Nov 22, 2018 22:03:45 GMT
Wow, what an intriguing beginning! You really have a talent for storytelling! I love the way you describe the world and the warring forces -- it's like I'm reading from an ancient scroll telling of enigmatic events long past. . .
Very well-done. I'm quite interested to see where this'll go. Thanks! I've always enjoyed descriptive storytelling, so I tried to go for that in this story. I'll release the chapters weekly (since this was the prologue I'll post the first chapter on Saturday, then it'll be weekly). Sounds good!
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Post by Epl317 on Nov 24, 2018 4:05:35 GMT
The First Spinjitzu Master: arc 1-The First Realm (chapter1)
That one fateful day when the chief Oni made that one fateful order, the order to make sure no Dragon would have any effect on the realm, was the day an infinite war would come into the realm. The first thing the Dragons created was a hollow stone. It was 17 feet high, and 39 feet in width and depth (bigger than the average dragon, but smaller than the Firstbourne). A dragon of stone created it for her half stone-half fire son to live in when he turned 15 (The age of a dragon who had achieved the wisdom needed to endure the realm and leave it's original family). When the Oni saw this, three of the strongest did as they were ordered, they used their powers to twice their potential in order to make sure the Dragons didn't effect the realm in any way. When they did this the stone was not only destroyed, it was turned into pure darkness, darkness so dark that nothing could ever be created in that spot again. The Dragons realized what must be done, they must use their powers to twice their potential as well.
The war had gone on for seven years, seven years of the Oni turning the Dragons' creations to darkness and the Dragons creating objects with twice as many atoms, each atom being twice as thick so that no Oni could destroy them, when that fateful being came into the realm. The Firstbourne realized the war would be eternal. She needed a plan. After twenty-four hours straight of using her brain to it's full potential in prder to come up with a plan, she decided to create something the Oni could not destroy. She went to the tallest peak and created something no one could imagine a dragon creating. She created darkness, evil, destruction. She created... an Oni. She knew the Oni wouldn't destroy one of their own kind, they respected each other's power. The Dragons would have made a lasting effect on the realm, they would have won, if it weren't for the being's strange ability. It was darkness created by light, which means it saw the need for both sides. From this point forward there were three species: Dragons, embodiments of light. Oni, embodiments of darkness. And humans, embodiments of balance.
Chapter1, end
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Post by LordTigress on Nov 24, 2018 15:16:24 GMT
The First Spinjitzu Master: arc 1-The First Realm (chapter1)
That one fateful day when the chief Oni made that one fateful order, the order to make sure no Dragon would have any effect on the realm, was the day an infinite war would come into the realm. The first thing the Dragons created was a hollow stone. It was 17 feet high, and 39 feet in width and depth (bigger than the average dragon, but smaller than the Firstbourne). A dragon of stone created it for her half stone-half fire son to live in when he turned 15 (The age of a dragon who had achieved the wisdom needed to endure the realm and leave it's original family). When the Oni saw this, three of the strongest did as they were ordered, they used their powers to twice their potential in order to make sure the Dragons didn't effect the realm in any way. When they did this the stone was not only destroyed, it was turned into pure darkness, darkness so dark that nothing could ever be created in that spot again. The Dragons realized what must be done, they must use their powers to twice their potential as well. The war had gone on for seven years, seven years of the Oni turning the Dragons' creations to darkness and the Dragons creating objects with twice as many atoms, each atom being twice as thick so that no Oni could destroy them, when that fateful being came into the realm. The Firstbourne realized the war would be eternal. She needed a plan. After twenty-four hours straight of using her brain to it's full potential in prder to come up with a plan, she decided to create something the Oni could not destroy. She went to the tallest peak and created something no one could imagine a dragon creating. She created darkness, evil, destruction. She created... an Oni. She knew the Oni wouldn't destroy one of their own kind, they respected each other's power. The Dragons would have made a lasting effect on the realm, they would have won, if it weren't for the being's strange ability. It was darkness created by light, which means it saw the need for both sides. From this point forward there were three species: Dragons, embodiments of light. Oni, embodiments of darkness. And humans, embodiments of balance.
Chapter1, end Ooh, chills. . .
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Post by Epl317 on Dec 1, 2018 20:32:48 GMT
The First Spinjitzu Master: arc 1-The First Realm (chapter 2)
That day, a child was born. It was a child with a strange power. He saw the need for both sides, light and dark. The Firstbourne created him because the Oni would not destroy him, which meant the Dragons would have made a lasting impact on the realm. If this had happened, the Oni would have lost their minds, and destroyed themselves. However, the human saw the need for the Oni and knew he had to prevent them from self-destruction.
The child was created with the body and mind of a 15 year-old boy. Since he was an Oni created by a Dragon, he bared the powers of both. He also bared the shape of an Oni, however, since he was created by a being of Light, his skin was colored yellow.
This boy, the age of an adult Dragon, was free to do as he pleased. However, Firstbourne insisted he show himself to the Oni. Their conversation went as follows: "I have created you to be a lasting creation upon this place. The Oni won't destroy you, they will destroy themselves." "So I am a weapon, created only for your will, what you want, nothing that has to do with my enjoyment. Shall I not be free, as any living thing should be?" "You will bring freedom to others, and therefore shall be content." "Shall I not be free? Shall I not do as I please?" "You will go to the chief Oni, Shigaraiham, and he shall destroy himself." "I shall not task myself with the horrid thing you please." "And your reasoning? You're of Oni blood, therefore you are my enemy." "I am not your enemy, you created me to assist you." "Then why are you of no help to my kind?" "I will not assist you, because you will be too powerful. You will be corrupted, then realize your corruption, then destroy yourself and everyone with you." "You could not know such things. You're still young, lacking of wisdom." "There must be balance. That is my true meaning." "My kind already has won." "I am not of your kind. I will assist the Oni in any way. I will lie. They will never know the truth." "I suppose you were a mistake. You have brought your own end."
However, the Firstbourne did not realize that this was the boy's intention. Balance would live on forever...
Chapter2: End
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Post by TeaLeaf❀ on Dec 2, 2018 7:44:46 GMT
The First Spinjitzu Master: arc 1-The First Realm (chapter 2)
That day, a child was born. It was a child with a strange power. He saw the need for both sides, light and dark. The Firstbourne created him because the Oni would not destroy him, which meant the Dragons would have made a lasting impact on the realm. If this had happened, the Oni would have lost their minds, and destroyed themselves. However, the human saw the need for the Oni and knew he had to prevent them from self-destruction. The child was created with the body and mind of a 15 year-old boy. Since he was an Oni created by a Dragon, he bared the powers of both. He also bared the shape of an Oni, however, since he was created by a being of Light, his skin was colored yellow. This boy, the age of an adult Dragon, was free to do as he pleased. However, Firstbourne insisted he show himself to the Oni. Their conversation went as follows: "I have created you to be a lasting creation upon this place. The Oni won't destroy you, they will destroy themselves." "So I am a weapon, created only for your will, what you want, nothing that has to do with my enjoyment. Shall I not be free, as any living thing should be?" "You will bring freedom to others, and therefore shall be content." "Shall I not be free? Shall I not do as I please?" "You will go to the chief Oni, Shigaraiham, and he shall destroy himself." "I shall not task myself with the horrid thing you please." "And your reasoning? You're of Oni blood, therefore you are my enemy." "I am not your enemy, you created me to assist you." "Then why are you of no help to my kind?" "I will not assist you, because you will be too powerful. You will be corrupted, then realize your corruption, then destroy yourself and everyone with you." "You could not know such things. You're still young, lacking of wisdom." "There must be balance. That is my true meaning." "My kind already has won." "I am not of your kind. I will assist the Oni in any way. I will lie. They will never know the truth." "I suppose you were a mistake. You have brought your own end." However, the Firstbourne did not realize that this was the boy's intention. Balance would live on forever...
Chapter2: End I love...LOVE...the dialogue here. Nicely done! Awesome story and I can't wait for more!
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Post by LordTigress on Dec 2, 2018 15:23:48 GMT
The First Spinjitzu Master: arc 1-The First Realm (chapter 2)
That day, a child was born. It was a child with a strange power. He saw the need for both sides, light and dark. The Firstbourne created him because the Oni would not destroy him, which meant the Dragons would have made a lasting impact on the realm. If this had happened, the Oni would have lost their minds, and destroyed themselves. However, the human saw the need for the Oni and knew he had to prevent them from self-destruction. The child was created with the body and mind of a 15 year-old boy. Since he was an Oni created by a Dragon, he bared the powers of both. He also bared the shape of an Oni, however, since he was created by a being of Light, his skin was colored yellow. This boy, the age of an adult Dragon, was free to do as he pleased. However, Firstbourne insisted he show himself to the Oni. Their conversation went as follows: "I have created you to be a lasting creation upon this place. The Oni won't destroy you, they will destroy themselves." "So I am a weapon, created only for your will, what you want, nothing that has to do with my enjoyment. Shall I not be free, as any living thing should be?" "You will bring freedom to others, and therefore shall be content." "Shall I not be free? Shall I not do as I please?" "You will go to the chief Oni, Shigaraiham, and he shall destroy himself." "I shall not task myself with the horrid thing you please." "And your reasoning? You're of Oni blood, therefore you are my enemy." "I am not your enemy, you created me to assist you." "Then why are you of no help to my kind?" "I will not assist you, because you will be too powerful. You will be corrupted, then realize your corruption, then destroy yourself and everyone with you." "You could not know such things. You're still young, lacking of wisdom." "There must be balance. That is my true meaning." "My kind already has won." "I am not of your kind. I will assist the Oni in any way. I will lie. They will never know the truth." "I suppose you were a mistake. You have brought your own end." However, the Firstbourne did not realize that this was the boy's intention. Balance would live on forever...
Chapter2: End *bookmarks* :3
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Post by Epl317 on Dec 2, 2018 17:40:22 GMT
The First Spinjitzu Master: arc 1-The First Realm (chapter 2)
That day, a child was born. It was a child with a strange power. He saw the need for both sides, light and dark. The Firstbourne created him because the Oni would not destroy him, which meant the Dragons would have made a lasting impact on the realm. If this had happened, the Oni would have lost their minds, and destroyed themselves. However, the human saw the need for the Oni and knew he had to prevent them from self-destruction. The child was created with the body and mind of a 15 year-old boy. Since he was an Oni created by a Dragon, he bared the powers of both. He also bared the shape of an Oni, however, since he was created by a being of Light, his skin was colored yellow. This boy, the age of an adult Dragon, was free to do as he pleased. However, Firstbourne insisted he show himself to the Oni. Their conversation went as follows: "I have created you to be a lasting creation upon this place. The Oni won't destroy you, they will destroy themselves." "So I am a weapon, created only for your will, what you want, nothing that has to do with my enjoyment. Shall I not be free, as any living thing should be?" "You will bring freedom to others, and therefore shall be content." "Shall I not be free? Shall I not do as I please?" "You will go to the chief Oni, Shigaraiham, and he shall destroy himself." "I shall not task myself with the horrid thing you please." "And your reasoning? You're of Oni blood, therefore you are my enemy." "I am not your enemy, you created me to assist you." "Then why are you of no help to my kind?" "I will not assist you, because you will be too powerful. You will be corrupted, then realize your corruption, then destroy yourself and everyone with you." "You could not know such things. You're still young, lacking of wisdom." "There must be balance. That is my true meaning." "My kind already has won." "I am not of your kind. I will assist the Oni in any way. I will lie. They will never know the truth." "I suppose you were a mistake. You have brought your own end." However, the Firstbourne did not realize that this was the boy's intention. Balance would live on forever...
Chapter2: End I love...LOVE...the dialogue here. Nicely done! Awesome story and I can't wait for more! Thanks! I'm glad you like it!
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Post by TheGreatCon on Dec 3, 2018 22:49:50 GMT
This story has some great depth behind it! Keep up the good work!
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Post by Epl317 on Dec 3, 2018 23:08:00 GMT
This story has some great depth behind it! Keep up the good work! Thanks! I will.
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Post by ninjagofanmam on Dec 4, 2018 4:55:04 GMT
Absolutely brilliant story so far!
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Post by Epl317 on Dec 5, 2018 0:10:18 GMT
Absolutely brilliant story so far! Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it!
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Post by Naomi on Dec 5, 2018 22:54:20 GMT
Very nice! Also, are you the Epl317 AKA Eli. From Ninjago Gallery? I'm WarriorsFan12.
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