All right, great! So, did you have any questions in particular you wanted to ask MockingbirdInc and I about the story? Or would you rather we first gave you our thoughts about what we read?
Post by MockingbirdInc on Mar 2, 2018 21:17:50 GMT
If memory serves, I don't think there was anything to stick out at me to change other than some simple wording choices. So far, it sounds pretty good to me.
What exactly do you need assistance in with planned?
All right, great! So, did you have any questions in particular you wanted to ask MockingbirdInc and I about the story? Or would you rather we first gave you our thoughts about what we read?
Sorry I didn't get to this earlier!
I suppose thoughts . . . I've actually written some more.
If memory serves, I don't think there was anything to stick out at me to change other than some simple wording choices. So far, it sounds pretty good to me.
What exactly do you need assistance in with planned?
I'd like help with wording choices too, I suppose.
Well, so I suppose I should say what I was going to say:
Clouse gives Emerald to the Anacondrai, and Krux and Acronix capture her, and they accidently make a time vortex with their powers, and Emerald goes through the time vortex before Krux and Acronix about a month earlier than the Time Twins. I was originally planning for her to help the ninja, but then I decided that it would be great if she was Harumi! So I planned out the scene when the Royal Family found her.
Of course, the Harumi part is either ruined if I still want her to be a hero, or I could just do my story about her pain and whatnot.
All right, great! So, did you have any questions in particular you wanted to ask MockingbirdInc and I about the story? Or would you rather we first gave you our thoughts about what we read?
Sorry I didn't get to this earlier!
I suppose thoughts . . . I've actually written some more.
No worries!
Ooh, nice! Well, from what I read, I thought that was a good beginning for your story; you quickly introduced a conflict -- that being the warning the Writers of Destiny gave to the First Spinjitzu Master -- that would catch the interest of potential readers. That's always a good start.
(And yes, I'm keeping track of what you and Mock are talking about, too. )
I suppose thoughts . . . I've actually written some more.
No worries!
Ooh, nice! Well, from what I read, I thought that was a good beginning for your story; you quickly introduced a conflict -- that being the warning the Writers of Destiny gave to the First Spinjitzu Master -- that would catch the interest of potential readers. That's always a good start.
(And yes, I'm keeping track of what you and Mock are talking about, too. )
Ooh, nice! Well, from what I read, I thought that was a good beginning for your story; you quickly introduced a conflict -- that being the warning the Writers of Destiny gave to the First Spinjitzu Master -- that would catch the interest of potential readers. That's always a good start.
(And yes, I'm keeping track of what you and Mock are talking about, too. )
Was my poem good?
(I gathered from your like. )
*looks back at file* Oh, yeah, well done there! That was a nice touch -- give the reader a little shiver as they begin.
*looks back at file* Oh, yeah, well done there! That was a nice touch -- give the reader a little shiver as they begin.
Oh good, that's what I wanted.
So, ideas on whether to just do it on Harumi and basically transform my story into a story about how she felt, or a nice story about a hero who helps the ninja like it was originally going to be? (I was going to have her be Samurai X, but that didn't turn out. . . .)
*looks back at file* Oh, yeah, well done there! That was a nice touch -- give the reader a little shiver as they begin.
Oh good, that's what I wanted.
So, ideas on whether to just do it on Harumi and basically transform my story into a story about how she felt, or a nice story about a hero who helps the ninja like it was originally going to be? (I was going to have her be Samurai X, but that didn't turn out. . . .)
Well, I suppose that depends on what you want the end result to be. Or, to be more specific, when. Would you like the Daughter's main part of her story to take place during the current timeline? an earlier time period when the ninja were just beginning their missions? Or even further back in time, when Wu and Garmadon were young? As a daughter of the FSM, I'd think the girl would experience a close connection to her brothers and perhaps Misako, and logically I'd assume that much of the story of their relationship would take place during their earlier years. But, back to the original question: when do you want the main portion of the story to take place?
So, ideas on whether to just do it on Harumi and basically transform my story into a story about how she felt, or a nice story about a hero who helps the ninja like it was originally going to be? (I was going to have her be Samurai X, but that didn't turn out. . . .)
Well, I suppose that depends on what you want the end result to be. Or, to be more specific, when. Would you like the Daughter's main part of her story to take place during the current timeline? an earlier time period when the ninja were just beginning their missions? Or even further back in time, when Wu and Garmadon were young? As a daughter of the FSM, I'd think the girl would experience a close connection to her brothers and perhaps Misako, and logically I'd assume that much of the story of their relationship would take place during their earlier years. But, back to the original question: when do you want the main portion of the story to take place?
As I said to Mock, I was having her come out of the Temporal Vortex before season 7, but I could make it so she came out earlier.
Well, I suppose that depends on what you want the end result to be. Or, to be more specific, when. Would you like the Daughter's main part of her story to take place during the current timeline? an earlier time period when the ninja were just beginning their missions? Or even further back in time, when Wu and Garmadon were young? As a daughter of the FSM, I'd think the girl would experience a close connection to her brothers and perhaps Misako, and logically I'd assume that much of the story of their relationship would take place during their earlier years. But, back to the original question: when do you want the main portion of the story to take place?
As I said to Mock, I was having her come out of the Temporal Vortex before season 7, but I could make it so she came out earlier.
Ah, I think I see. So she reappears around the present timeline after vanishing from the past?
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So, did you have any questions in particular you wanted to ask 
So far, it sounds pretty good to me. ![[y]](http://storage.proboards.com/6672327/images/WYWPH2VRo26pOFDid7QZ.png)
So, did you have any questions in particular you wanted to ask 
Well, from what I read, I thought that was a good beginning for your story; you quickly introduced a conflict -- that being the warning the Writers of Destiny gave to the First Spinjitzu Master -- that would catch the interest of potential readers. That's always a good start. 
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