I was disappointed, not so much in the people around me, but more in myself. I had not been putting enough focus on training these last few months. I should have though, if I wanted to be a knight that's all I should be focusing on. But there's so many things that distract me, how am I supposed too focus on it? I approached my horse and stroked his neck. I was misrubele and wanted to go home, so I saddled him and mounted him. The two of us then left that horibble place quickly. Out the gates and over the grassy hillsides. Soon we were trotting over falter ground. Gray clouds had gathered, only seemingly making my mood all the worse. It started to rain, it fell on my face and in my hair. My horse blinked away the raindrops as they they fell on his face too. I was nearing home when the rain stopped falling. Light shown through the clouds and a rainbow was now visible. This shothed my mood and brightened my spirit. Perhaps it wasn't to late, I could start training harder than ever right now and maybe, just maybe reach my goal of knighthood.
( sorry if that was a bit long. I just kinda wrote what came to me. )
Lesson two homework: ( I'm doing Zephyr since she's my most development character)
Name: Zephyr Gender: female Element: Gravity Hair color: blonde, with blue dyed streaks Eye color ( if she wasn't a minifig): green Clothing: blue ninja suit with some green on it as well. Prsonallity: shy, paranoid, thrill seeker, friendly when comfortable. Likes to read comics, and wants to be a ninja. Backstory: Zephyr was raised in Hiroshi's Labyrinth with her siblings, cousins, uncle, aunt, parents and two of her grandparents. They were all hiding from a threat the adults never spoke of, they would visit coastal towns nearby every once in awhile, but would try not to draw to much attention. Finally she came of age and her and her older brother were allowed to leave as long as they did not speak of their origins. ( The rest is spoliorish. )
Just getting into writing so any help is appreciated. :3
Name: Lucas Reap Weapon: Electrically charged sai Civilian appearance: Black shaved hair but longer on top, beard, brown eyes and usually a black hoodie Vigilante appearance: Armoured black and gray costume with a skull like mask and hood Personality: Depressed, angry, but willing to do anything for the people he loves
Backstory: He loses his family to an "accident" at the age of 12 and he ends up in a gang that controls the city (Vertigo City), under the "protection" of Xavier Black, the gangs leader, eventually he takes part in a hit and run and does something that he'll regret for the rest of his life, which eventually leads to a life in vigilantism.
I plan to write this on the superhero story boards. :3
I was disappointed, not so much in the people around me, but more in myself. I had not been putting enough focus on training these last few months. I should have though, if I wanted to be a knight that's all I should be focusing on. But there's so many things that distract me, how am I supposed too focus on it? I approached my horse and stroked his neck. I was misrubele and wanted to go home, so I saddled him and mounted him. The two of us then left that horibble place quickly. Out the gates and over the grassy hillsides. Soon we were trotting over falter ground. Gray clouds had gathered, only seemingly making my mood all the worse. It started to rain, it fell on my face and in my hair. My horse blinked away the raindrops as they they fell on his face too. I was nearing home when the rain stopped falling. Light shown through the clouds and a rainbow was now visible. This shothed my mood and brightened my spirit. Perhaps it wasn't to late, I could start training harder than ever right now and maybe, just maybe reach my goal of knighthood.
( sorry if that was a bit long. I just kinda wrote what came to me. )
Lesson two homework: ( I'm doing Zephyr since she's my most development character)
Name: Zephyr Gender: female Element: Gravity Hair color: blonde, with blue dyed streaks Eye color ( if she wasn't a minifig): green Clothing: blue ninja suit with some green on it as well. Prsonallity: shy, paranoid, thrill seeker, friendly when comfortable. Likes to read comics, and wants to be a ninja. Backstory: Zephyr was raised in Hiroshi's Labyrinth with her siblings, cousins, uncle, aunt, parents and two of her grandparents. They were all hiding from a threat the adults never spoke of, they would visit coastal towns nearby every once in awhile, but would try not to draw to much attention. Finally she came of age and her and her older brother were allowed to leave as long as they did not speak of their origins. ( The rest is spoliorish. )
Thank you.
Lesson One Homework Comments: Not long at all. It was very good. I love how you had the setting affect the main character's mood.
Lesson Two Homework Comments: Fine by me. Very good. You had a lot of detail, amd I really need to read you're book. Maybe when I find a little more time.
-last edited on Jan 27, 2018 20:59:36 GMT by TeaLeaf❀
Post by TeaLeaf❀ on Jan 27, 2018 20:58:58 GMT
Oh boy. I'm super late. Can I turn in my homework for partial credits?
Lesson One:
I have been sitting here for a while now, occasionally sipping my lukewarm cup of coffee as I read over the newspaper without interest. Not much has happened today, and it seems that even the darkest part of the city has decided to give it a rest on this uneventful Sunday evening. Yet the noises from the inside of the cafe completely broke my concentration; ever since a rowdy group of teens showed up half and hour ago, their constant bantering ruined the peaceful atmosphere. I sigh and decide to give up reading all together. Then something catches my attention: a young girl exiting from the restaurant on opposite side of the street, hands full of tied-up bags of trash that are then tossed into the dumpster. She looks up at the sidewalk clock, her eyes dreary and tired. But a little smile creeps up her exhausted expression and she returns to the brightly-colored interior of the busy eatery with quick, excited steps.
Why is she so happy?
Lesson Two: (I'm just gotta make one up on the spot)
Name: Jonah Wesley Appearance: black & short hair, glasses & watch, shirt & tie (with the sleeves rolled up), dark brown eyes, usually carries around a work bag. Personality: loyal and do things by the book, comes off as dull and boring but offers interesting insights and creative solutions toward problems, just, good natured, bad at handling spontaneous situations, careful, hard-working, trusting, loves his family very much (and places them above all other things), craves caffeine on a daily basis.
Oh boy. I'm super late. Can I turn in my homework for partial credits?
Lesson One:
I have been sitting here for a while now, occasionally sipping my lukewarm cup of coffee as I read over the newspaper without interest. Not much has happened today, and it seems that even the darkest part of the city has decided to give it a rest on this uneventful Sunday evening. Yet the noises from the inside of the cafe completely broke my concentration; ever since a rowdy group of teens showed up half and hour ago, their constant bantering ruined the peaceful atmosphere. I sigh and decide to give up reading all together. Then something catches my attention: a young girl exiting from the restaurant on opposite side of the street, hands full of tied-up bags of trash that are then tossed into the dumpster. She looks up at the sidewalk clock, her eyes dreary and tired. But a little smile creeps up her exhausted expression and she returns to the brightly-colored interior of the busy eatery with quick, excited steps.
Why is she so happy?
Lesson Two: (I'm just gotta make one up on the spot)
Name: Jonah Wesley Appearance: black & short hair, glasses & watch, shirt & tie (with the sleeves rolled up), dark brown eyes, usually carries around a work bag. Personality: loyal and do things by the book, comes off as dull and boring but offers interesting insights and creative solutions toward problems, just, good natured, bad at handling spontaneous situations, careful, hard-working, trusting, loves his family very much (and places them above all other things), craves caffeine on a daily basis.
There we go.
Not really grading. Just giving pointers, I guess.
Gosh. I wanna know why she's so happy, too. Really great. I love how you told a small story without giving a lot of information on the characters. Now in all seriousness, why was she happy?
Great bio. It's short, sweet, and to the point, which is great if you are wanting to have people build on that later. Like in a Roleplay, for example.
Just getting into writing so any help is appreciated. :3
Name: Lucas Reap Weapon: Electrically charged sai Civilian appearance: Black shaved hair but longer on top, beard, brown eyes and usually a black hoodie Vigilante appearance: Armoured black and gray costume with a skull like mask and hood Personality: Depressed, angry, but willing to do anything for the people he loves
Backstory: He loses his family to an "accident" at the age of 12 and he ends up in a gang that controls the city (Vertigo City), under the "protection" of Xavier Black, the gangs leader, eventually he takes part in a hit and run and does something that he'll regret for the rest of his life, which eventually leads to a life in vigilantism.
I plan to write this on the superhero story boards. :3
I was disappointed, not so much in the people around me, but more in myself. I had not been putting enough focus on training these last few months. I should have though, if I wanted to be a knight that's all I should be focusing on. But there's so many things that distract me, how am I supposed too focus on it? I approached my horse and stroked his neck. I was misrubele and wanted to go home, so I saddled him and mounted him. The two of us then left that horibble place quickly. Out the gates and over the grassy hillsides. Soon we were trotting over falter ground. Gray clouds had gathered, only seemingly making my mood all the worse. It started to rain, it fell on my face and in my hair. My horse blinked away the raindrops as they they fell on his face too. I was nearing home when the rain stopped falling. Light shown through the clouds and a rainbow was now visible. This shothed my mood and brightened my spirit. Perhaps it wasn't to late, I could start training harder than ever right now and maybe, just maybe reach my goal of knighthood.
( sorry if that was a bit long. I just kinda wrote what came to me. )
Lesson two homework: ( I'm doing Zephyr since she's my most development character)
Name: Zephyr Gender: female Element: Gravity Hair color: blonde, with blue dyed streaks Eye color ( if she wasn't a minifig): green Clothing: blue ninja suit with some green on it as well. Prsonallity: shy, paranoid, thrill seeker, friendly when comfortable. Likes to read comics, and wants to be a ninja. Backstory: Zephyr was raised in Hiroshi's Labyrinth with her siblings, cousins, uncle, aunt, parents and two of her grandparents. They were all hiding from a threat the adults never spoke of, they would visit coastal towns nearby every once in awhile, but would try not to draw to much attention. Finally she came of age and her and her older brother were allowed to leave as long as they did not speak of their origins. ( The rest is spoliorish. )
Great. You've created your character. Now, we need to figure out their relationships with people.
Relationships basically "build" up the character and their story. Simple stuff like "Who's their enemy?", "Do they have any friends or are they a loner and an outcast?", and "Any Family?" are the basics.
In my story, A Christmas Adventure, everyone is friends with each other. At the moment There aren't any major enemies.
In my story, Love With a Price, there are multiple relationships. Rose and Lloyd don't have the same type of relationship compared to Nya and Jay. Same for Wu and Misako compared to Pythor and Cole.
Relationships can also show you're character's personality.
For example, your character can seem really tough and mean on the streets, but is really soft-hearted and kind near their friends and family.
Homework: Give some examples of relationships with your character.
Oh boy. I'm super late. Can I turn in my homework for partial credits?
Lesson One:
I have been sitting here for a while now, occasionally sipping my lukewarm cup of coffee as I read over the newspaper without interest. Not much has happened today, and it seems that even the darkest part of the city has decided to give it a rest on this uneventful Sunday evening. Yet the noises from the inside of the cafe completely broke my concentration; ever since a rowdy group of teens showed up half and hour ago, their constant bantering ruined the peaceful atmosphere. I sigh and decide to give up reading all together. Then something catches my attention: a young girl exiting from the restaurant on opposite side of the street, hands full of tied-up bags of trash that are then tossed into the dumpster. She looks up at the sidewalk clock, her eyes dreary and tired. But a little smile creeps up her exhausted expression and she returns to the brightly-colored interior of the busy eatery with quick, excited steps.
Why is she so happy?
Lesson Two: (I'm just gotta make one up on the spot)
Name: Jonah Wesley Appearance: black & short hair, glasses & watch, shirt & tie (with the sleeves rolled up), dark brown eyes, usually carries around a work bag. Personality: loyal and do things by the book, comes off as dull and boring but offers interesting insights and creative solutions toward problems, just, good natured, bad at handling spontaneous situations, careful, hard-working, trusting, loves his family very much (and places them above all other things), craves caffeine on a daily basis.
There we go.
Not really grading. Just giving pointers, I guess.
Gosh. I wanna know why she's so happy, too. Really great. I love how you told a small story without giving a lot of information on the characters. Now in all seriousness, why was she happy?
Great bio. It's short, sweet, and to the point, which is great if you are wanting to have people build on that later. Like in a Roleplay, for example.
Keep up the great work.
*wipes off sweat*
Well, I'm not really sure why she's so happy. Maybe a special date?
Not really grading. Just giving pointers, I guess.
Gosh. I wanna know why she's so happy, too. Really great. I love how you told a small story without giving a lot of information on the characters. Now in all seriousness, why was she happy?
Great bio. It's short, sweet, and to the point, which is great if you are wanting to have people build on that later. Like in a Roleplay, for example.
Keep up the great work.
*wipes off sweat*
Well, I'm not really sure why she's so happy. Maybe a special date?
Great. You've created your character. Now, we need to figure out their relationships with people.
Relationships basically "build" up the character and their story. Simple stuff like "Who's their enemy?", "Do they have any friends or are they a loner and an outcast?", and "Any Family?" are the basics.
In my story, A Christmas Adventure, everyone is friends with each other. At the moment There aren't any major enemies.
In my story, Love With a Price, there are multiple relationships. Rose and Lloyd don't have the same type of relationship compared to Nya and Jay. Same for Wu and Misako compared to Pythor and Cole.
Relationships can also show you're character's personality.
For example, your character can seem really tough and mean on the streets, but is really soft-hearted and kind near their friends and family.
Homework: Give some examples of relationships with your character.
@bolded, Wow. That's going to be very interesting. I wonder what conflict is going to trigger that.
For my RP character: Zach has a mom and a dad that love him very much, but Zach has been distant from his parents ever since he started working in the mechanics industry.
Zach doesn't really have any enemies, but he's more of a victim of the events that occur around him. For example, Emperor Palpatine is still after the Jedi and other people who possess the Force, the Preeminent destroyed his buisness in Ninjago, Weeping Angels went after him, and Bounty Hunters from the Trade Federation tried to capture him.
Zach's has a friend named Lila Barton, Hawkeye's daughter. They met by coincidence as they were both trapped in a haunted room full of Weeping Angels. They have a relationship kind of like Kim and Ron from Disney Channel's Kim Possible. Lila, like Kim Possible, is smart, fearless, and brave. While Zach, like Ron Stoppable, is gullible, fearful, and timid.
Lastly, Zach has some good relations with his business clients such as Han Solo and Ronin. He's recently met Hawkeye, Iron Man, and Iron Man's Bodyguard Happy.
I was disappointed, not so much in the people around me, but more in myself. I had not been putting enough focus on training these last few months. I should have though, if I wanted to be a knight that's all I should be focusing on. But there's so many things that distract me, how am I supposed too focus on it? I approached my horse and stroked his neck. I was misrubele and wanted to go home, so I saddled him and mounted him. The two of us then left that horibble place quickly. Out the gates and over the grassy hillsides. Soon we were trotting over falter ground. Gray clouds had gathered, only seemingly making my mood all the worse. It started to rain, it fell on my face and in my hair. My horse blinked away the raindrops as they they fell on his face too. I was nearing home when the rain stopped falling. Light shown through the clouds and a rainbow was now visible. This shothed my mood and brightened my spirit. Perhaps it wasn't to late, I could start training harder than ever right now and maybe, just maybe reach my goal of knighthood.
( sorry if that was a bit long. I just kinda wrote what came to me. )
Lesson two homework: ( I'm doing Zephyr since she's my most development character)
Name: Zephyr Gender: female Element: Gravity Hair color: blonde, with blue dyed streaks Eye color ( if she wasn't a minifig): green Clothing: blue ninja suit with some green on it as well. Prsonallity: shy, paranoid, thrill seeker, friendly when comfortable. Likes to read comics, and wants to be a ninja. Backstory: Zephyr was raised in Hiroshi's Labyrinth with her siblings, cousins, uncle, aunt, parents and two of her grandparents. They were all hiding from a threat the adults never spoke of, they would visit coastal towns nearby every once in awhile, but would try not to draw to much attention. Finally she came of age and her and her older brother were allowed to leave as long as they did not speak of their origins. ( The rest is spoliorish. )
Thank you.
Lesson One Homework Comments: Not long at all. It was very good. I love how you had the setting affect the main character's mood.
Lesson Two Homework Comments: Fine by me. Very good. You had a lot of detail, amd I really need to read you're book. Maybe when I find a little more time.
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