OOC: Map looks good, however there are some problems.
1: The location of Kastle Koldheart is way off. Mount Cavora is supposed to be a completely neutral source of chi in this version of Chima, with no inhabitants or buildings around or on it. That's one of the big defining features of this version of Chima that distinguishes this RP from the others. The Queen can build her castle nearby, but having it right at the foot of Cavora would be in violation of an ancient treaty between the tribes to keep Cavora neutral.
2: The Snow Leopard territory is supposed to be a huge mountain range and arctic that takes up most of the north, like the Iron Mountains and the Arctic North in the main RP. As such, the Snow Leopard territory should actually take up what you labeled as the Koopa and Aquilan territories on the map; the Koopa territory can be in what you have labeled as the "Unclaimed junglelands", and the Aquilan territory should consist of just the northern islands. The leader of the Aquilan tribe left, so I don't think it'd be particularly unfair at all for their territory to be smaller than that of the other tribes'. Though if you feel that'd be unfair for the Aquilans in an in-universe sense, their territory can also consist of the land north of Cavora, the top half of what you have labeled as the "Koldheart Arbory" (which also looks ridiculously huge compared to the other tribes' territories, no offense).
Though don't get me wrong; other than those two big problems that needed to be addressed, this map looks great.
(OOC: Yeah, you didn't say such problems the first time I showed it off, and edited it first around. Kyuru is supposed to be the self-proclamed mediator of chi, she's supposed to distribute it, that is what i specifically wrote down for her character, her plot, and the castle, to be. It'll look weird to me to see an icy roman-esque aqueduct canal feed from Mt. Cavora into a castle that is like, miles away from the mountain, passing through the vast snow gardens Kastle Koldheart has, and could be an easy target to cut supply off from? Your wanting me to change what i wrote in for Kyuru, that is like Baton's Brian on me when i updated Parakefka's bio.)
(OOC: Otherwise that's all my beef, look at what baton said when i messed with Brian's canon. I can do the other things just fine, i connected the Dragon grave mountains to the Leopard territory easily on the first revision. and i can possibly shrink down the Aquilian territory, and your the leader sooo... hope you don't mind. And the Koldheart Arbory, it's supposed to be the equivalent to The Great Forest in the main RP. I put in a scale for a reason in the map. )
(OOC BTW, it'll look strange to see a snowy mountain biome cut directly into a desert biome all Minecraft-like, but who cares, we have no concern for our environment anyway! )
OOC: I didn't?
Well I had no idea about that. That completely contradicts what I established basically from the start about Cavora being neutral. Kyuru can have some aqueducts from the chi pool to her HQ if she wants, but every other tribe just walks up the barren bottom half of Cavora and gathers chi from the natural pool whenever they want, as they've been doing for a thousand years. Like I said, Cavora being a neutral source of natural energy with no HQs built on it or tribes distributing chi was one of the key defining features, if not the key defining feature, of this RP's version of Chima. I guess Kyuru can run a business in which she distributes chi to Chimians who are too lazy to make the trip farther north to Cavora, or are unable to make the full trip for whatever reason?
The Snow Leopards control their climate with their powers, like e Phoenix do (both in the canon RP and the show), so the Arctic mountain range being right above the desert would make sense.
Also, side note: the eagles here are golden eagles (I would've preferred hawks, but whatever), so that's how they were able to get in this RP despite being a subspecies of a canon Chima species. Also, I've had ideas for frog/toad and salamander tribes. I've also recently had an idea for a pterodactyl tribe and a pteranodon tribe, who are inter-dimensional rivals, but that one might be a bit out there, even for this RP.
(OOC: Do it, make them hawks and falcons and whatnot, Edessa Cubbage is an golden eagle, in the canon rp, so there ARE sub-species in the chima RP, same for Dealthstalker Scorponok. -Distant Captain Falcon noises in the... well, distance- )
OOC: The cabbage Cubbage guy was made (or retconned to be a golden eagle) after the Golden Eagles were introduced into the Fanon RP though, right? Maybe I'll just retcon the Aquilans to be hawks instead.
Scorponok is just a green scorpion though. Oh, wait... I didn't know Deathstalker was an actual scorpion species. I thought it was just the name of a rank you made up.
(OOC: Do it, make them hawks and falcons and whatnot, Edessa Cubbage is an golden eagle, in the canon rp, so there ARE sub-species in the chima RP, same for Dealthstalker Scorponok. -Distant Captain Falcon noises in the... well, distance- )
OOC: The cabbage Cubbage guy was made (or retconned to be a golden eagle) after the Golden Eagles were introduced into the Fanon RP though, right? Maybe I'll just retcon the Aquilans to be hawks instead.
Scorponok is just a green scorpion though. Oh, wait... I didn't know Deathstalker was an actual scorpion species. I thought it was just the name of a rank you made up.
(OOC: Yeah, i can see where you'd be mistaken, i did put the Latin species denomination in it when i introduced said rank. And lel, Edessa Cabbage. XD Reminds me of that Cabbage salesman in Avatar. And... Well, i just wanted a different species of eagle in the eagle tribe for once. It's not like he's a Pidgeot in disguise or something. )
(OOC: Yeah, you didn't say such problems the first time I showed it off, and edited it first around. Kyuru is supposed to be the self-proclamed mediator of chi, she's supposed to distribute it, that is what i specifically wrote down for her character, her plot, and the castle, to be. It'll look weird to me to see an icy roman-esque aqueduct canal feed from Mt. Cavora into a castle that is like, miles away from the mountain, passing through the vast snow gardens Kastle Koldheart has, and could be an easy target to cut supply off from? Your wanting me to change what i wrote in for Kyuru, that is like Baton's Brian on me when i updated Parakefka's bio.)
(OOC: Otherwise that's all my beef, look at what baton said when i messed with Brian's canon. I can do the other things just fine, i connected the Dragon grave mountains to the Leopard territory easily on the first revision. and i can possibly shrink down the Aquilian territory, and your the leader sooo... hope you don't mind. And the Koldheart Arbory, it's supposed to be the equivalent to The Great Forest in the main RP. I put in a scale for a reason in the map. )
(OOC BTW, it'll look strange to see a snowy mountain biome cut directly into a desert biome all Minecraft-like, but who cares, we have no concern for our environment anyway! )
OOC: I didn't?
Well I had no idea about that. That completely contradicts what I established basically from the start about Cavora being neutral. Kyuru can have some aqueducts from the chi pool to her HQ if she wants, but every other tribe just walks up the barren bottom half of Cavora and gathers chi from the natural pool whenever they want, as they've been doing for a thousand years. Like I said, Cavora being a neutral source of natural energy with no HQs built on it or tribes distributing chi was one of the key defining features, if not the key defining feature, of this RP's version of Chima. I guess Kyuru can run a business in which she distributes chi to Chimians who are too lazy to make the trip farther north to Cavora, or are unable to make the full trip for whatever reason?
The Snow Leopards control their climate with their powers, like e Phoenix do (both in the canon RP and the show), so the Arctic mountain range being right above the desert would make sense.
...Now your givin me an idea of having three more kastles around mt. cavora from a ten mile radii circular perimeter, perfect protection if i do say so myself, me pokemanz'll be rich. But i'll prolly get to work on the Map ASAP, and possibly make a ref for Kyuru if i can. I need to get off my butt and rework the main chima rp map too.
OOC: Another random side note: this is the Joseph from SML (if you know, you know), so he might not actually be from the same original universe as the other koopas. I decided that I needed to address this, since, in the source material, the character Joseph is like 8-10 years old. Obviously, I've had to age him up for his rank to make sense, so in this RP he's in his late teens to early twenties.
IC: Joseph as Viokun was crashing into the car: "Ay bro, watch your wings! Watch your wings bro, WATCH YOUR WINGS—!"*
After the dialogue from Viokun and Parakefka... Joseph: "A'ight, so does this Pokémon dude have a physical message anymore? A letter, or somethin', I dunno...?"
*OOC-2: Like if you get the reference.
(OOC: Super Mario Logan! I haven't watched that guy in quite a while! i knew that character of yours reminded me of something, but i didn't know who! )
Back-story: From a dimensional rift in space, mostly likely from Palkia, A population of about 1000 or so Flygon disappeared from Hoenn. There, they were transported to Chima as a result of the destination of being one of the 16 realms. There, the Flygons lived undisturbed until the great distasters that gave rise to Mt. Cavora happened. From there, the Flygons took intrest in their primal animalistic state. From there on, once the Ground-Dragons took a few swigs, their now newly evolved forms took place, giving much stronger arms, human-like legs and much more powerful wings. There on, they established their chi river vally civilization, gaining the ability to use agriculture and chi for fast-developed technology. But after a while, the river dried up of Chi they harvested and wanted more, the hatred and greif of losing such a precious resource turned the surrounding area into a great desert, raging with never-ending sandstorms. This area became The Sand-dancer Desert, also known as to the Flygons, snakes, and pygmy owls as "Alsahra' Almuqadasa". (The Holy Desert.)
The Flygon tribe are inspired by Middle Easterners, and their values are based off to similar islamic values. They will take no mercy to wage holy wars on any crusading enemy whom opposes their religion, values, or any action they make, as they are very militaristic for protecting their holy-land; the land which once bore the fruit of creation from Arceus himself, which evolved them over their limitations quickly and effectively. Now they speak the regular chimian language, and even their own one named "Alkhitab". AKA, "Grounded Speech", which is basically a broken middle-eastern-inspired language that i made. Their clothing is styled after Middle-Eastern trends and and customs as well.
Anyways, onto the Flygon Kingdom itself.
The "Majlis Alhajar Alramlii Almalakii", AKA "Royal Sandstone Council".
The Council is as follows.
1ic: "Easifat Alsahra' Alrab" (Desert Storm Lord): Flygarra Draconia (AKA, "Easifat Alsahra' Alrab Fly Shan'Ran." He should always be called by this title by all flygons. plus the snakes and pygmy owls too, since they all in a preset alliance. )
3Ic: "Qayid Alharb Alumquadasa" (Holy War Commander) (there needs to be two characters whom are siblings to fill this role, Brother and Sister in combat always fight and protect each other!)
4ic: "Rijal Aldiyn Almuqadas." (The Holy Clergy)(about 5 roles open)
There there are the soldiers, which are many of one of the lord's men, and will protect and fight for him, wherever he may be.
Oh and also, this is what Flygarra Draconia looks like. Sorry if i forgotten the tail, i'll update it later over the labor day weekend.
Uhm, yeah... i improved his ref by leaps and bounds.
(OOC: Do it, make them hawks and falcons and whatnot, Edessa Cubbage is an golden eagle, in the canon rp, so there ARE sub-species in the chima RP, same for Dealthstalker Scorponok. -Distant Captain Falcon noises in the... well, distance- )
OOC: The cabbage Cubbage guy was made (or retconned to be a golden eagle) after the Golden Eagles were introduced into the Fanon RP though, right? Maybe I'll just retcon the Aquilans to be hawks instead.
Scorponok is just a green scorpion though. Oh, wait... I didn't know Deathstalker was an actual scorpion species. I thought it was just the name of a rank you made up.
OOC: The cabbage Cubbage guy was made (or retconned to be a golden eagle) after the Golden Eagles were introduced into the Fanon RP though, right? Maybe I'll just retcon the Aquilans to be hawks instead.
Scorponok is just a green scorpion though. Oh, wait... I didn't know Deathstalker was an actual scorpion species. I thought it was just the name of a rank you made up.
Uhm, yeah... i improved his ref by leaps and bounds.
OOC: He kind of looks like he's wearing goggles, which I guess makes sense actually.
(OOC: Fun fact, when flygons chi-evolved, they gained the ability to remove their natural eye-coverings and fasion them into eye-ware. Flygarra's near-sighted, so he modified the lensing of said eye-covering and wears his "goggles" to correct that vision problem, they also double as prescription sunglasses when tinted a different color using chi-infused paint! )
OOC: He kind of looks like he's wearing goggles, which I guess makes sense actually.
(OOC: Fun fact, when flygons chi-evolved, they gained the ability to remove their natural eye-coverings and fasion them into eye-ware. Flygarra's near-sighted, so he modified the lensing of said eye-covering and wears his "goggles" to correct that vision problem, they also double as prescription sunglasses when tinted a different color using chi-infused paint! )
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Kyuru is supposed to be the self-proclamed mediator of chi, she's supposed to distribute it, that is what i specifically wrote down for her character, her plot, and the castle, to be. It'll look weird to me to see an icy roman-esque aqueduct canal feed from Mt. Cavora into a castle that is like, miles away from the mountain, passing through the vast snow gardens Kastle Koldheart has, and could be an easy target to cut supply off from? 
Your wanting me to change what i wrote in for Kyuru, that is like Baton's Brian on me when i updated Parakefka's bio.)
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![[derp]](http://storage.proboards.com/6672327/images/YqNTPqyQUocVMYXZgUAI.png)
And lel, Edessa 
I haven't watched that guy in quite a while! i knew that character of yours reminded me of something, but i didn't know who! 
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Sorry if i forgotten the tail, i'll update it later over the labor day weekend.
Sorry if i forgotten the tail, i'll update it later over the labor day weekend.