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Post by gurnechnaz on Feb 6, 2018 23:35:26 GMT
I have a few notes. First, I liked it. It was... good. Second, it is good grammar to start a new paragraph whenever someone starts talking. Third, I liked the concepts you adopted from TDK, but you only used it for the flashbacks. That Two-Face was serious, deadly, and awesome. But you dropped all of that in modern-time. Also, why would he want all that money when he just wanted revenge on the Joker? Fourth, I wanted to see Cesar Romero talk more. As well as how Two-Face captured him. Fifth, That ending was, as you said, anti-climactic. I do not forgive you. Sixth, I enjoyed all the aspects and references you adopted from the TV show. I watch it often, and I can confirm there is no Two-Face in that series. Is that what inspired you to write this? Also, I liked the part where Batman and Robin connected the miles-apart dots and solved the mystery. Yours was a bit of a stretch, but then again, they always are. Seventh, you must do a crossover with the 1940's Superman. 1. Oh no. 2. WELL I’M SORRY! 3. Time and injuries and a bunch of half-useless cronies made him go a bit mental. To fund his activities. 4. May be revealed with time. 5. Sorry. 6. I once heard of a plan to introduce Two-Face with a similar origin, but it was scrapped due to the whole child-friendly thing. I wanted to see what that might be like. 7. Maybe I will.
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Judah
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Favorite LEGO theme: Yep, it's still Ninjago
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Post by Judah on Feb 7, 2018 19:53:43 GMT
I have a few notes. First, I liked it. It was... good. Second, it is good grammar to start a new paragraph whenever someone starts talking. Third, I liked the concepts you adopted from TDK, but you only used it for the flashbacks. That Two-Face was serious, deadly, and awesome. But you dropped all of that in modern-time. Also, why would he want all that money when he just wanted revenge on the Joker? Fourth, I wanted to see Cesar Romero talk more. As well as how Two-Face captured him. Fifth, That ending was, as you said, anti-climactic. I do not forgive you. Sixth, I enjoyed all the aspects and references you adopted from the TV show. I watch it often, and I can confirm there is no Two-Face in that series. Is that what inspired you to write this? Also, I liked the part where Batman and Robin connected the miles-apart dots and solved the mystery. Yours was a bit of a stretch, but then again, they always are. Seventh, you must do a crossover with the 1940's Superman. 1. Oh no. 2. WELL I’M SORRY! 3. Time and injuries and a bunch of half-useless cronies made him go a bit mental. To fund his activities. 4. May be revealed with time. 5. Sorry. 6. I once heard of a plan to introduce Two-Face with a similar origin, but it was scrapped due to the whole child-friendly thing. I wanted to see what that might be like. 7. Maybe I will. 1. What? 2. I forgive you. 3. Understandable. Like kidnapping the Joker? 4. Cool. 5. You'd better be. 6. Really? Where did you read this? 7. Yay!
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