Absolutely magnificent (Pun not originally intended)! Wonderful story so far! Some of the dialogue seems a bit choppy, but I think I actually like that. It adds character. FYI, though, I'm actually an introvert too (even if a somewhat more social one among certain people) (and I would also consider myself to have a healthy amount of insanity). Oh, and normally when I say that something is redundant, I say that it is both repetitive and redundant, just to further the point (not that that really fit either time you used the term). Otherwise, spot on with me! It was more of my moody/nonchalant side, but accurate nonetheless. Keep up the good work!
I agree it is magnificent! And spot on for my personalty. If we really got together and went on an Adventure I think it would be just like the story.
Thank you! I'm going to try to keep improving it as I go. *scribbles notes: make Kitkat more somewhat more introverted and crazy. :tounge: *
I think that being introverted and and healthily insane will be recurring themes in this story. :tounge:
And I won't be stopping you. Just be sure to keep the character of the story (and that may include some of the imperfect aspects ). Don't lose my argumentativeness over technical details, though! Or my extensive reason.
I can't imagine it not being.
I will be sure too. Those assets are bound to come in handy to our intrepid adventurers. I may have to ask you recite something technical though, as technical details of machinery are not my strongest point. :tounge:
As for critique, I love the story, but the formatting is a tad messy. There are paragraph breaks in the middle of sentences, and conversations are lumped together in an imposing block of text. It would be easier to read if you could clean it up.
As for critique, I love the story, but the formatting is a tad messy. There are paragraph breaks in the middle of sentences, and conversations are lumped together in an imposing block of text. It would be easier to read if you could clean it up.
Great story, though!
I saw it! it was good. I;ll write you in soon, though possibly not in this story about the castle.
Sorry about that! It spazzed on me with that one chapter. I'm trying to make it easy to read.
And I won't be stopping you. Just be sure to keep the character of the story (and that may include some of the imperfect aspects ). Don't lose my argumentativeness over technical details, though! Or my extensive reason.
I can't imagine it not being.
I will be sure too. Those assets are bound to come in handy to our intrepid adventurers. I may have to ask you recite something technical though, as technical details of machinery are not my strongest point. :tounge:
Well, just let me know when you want something from me, and I'll be happy to help.
Post by masterlegobuilders on Apr 4, 2017 19:38:53 GMT
So, I realised you might like a bio, based on what other people have been saying, so... (Unless you don't want my awesomeness )
Name: masterlegobuilders, MLB ect. Age: 14 Height: Really small Just over 5 feet Physical Strengths: None, literally none Mental Strengths: I'm a tactician, the sit-back-and-observe kind, but I would fight myself where I deemed others couldn't be trusted to do it correctly I'm good at Physics and Chemistry and Maths, as well as Technology. (My drawing is shameful though ) Personality: Ask 8legos, I don't remember Anything else: Mmmmmmm, I don't trust anyone else to do a job correctly, so I just go somewhere else rather than stress out over what they are doing
So, write me in when/if you feel like it. Ask me if you want anything else
One mod to rule them all and in the darkness ban them - Lord of the Mods "I am the Mod Reborn!" - masterlegobuilders I'm the real boss
So, I realised you might like a bio, based on what other people have been saying, so... (Unless you don't want my awesomeness )
Name: masterlegobuilders, MLB ect. Age: 14 Height: Really small Just over 5 feet Physical Strengths: None, literally none Mental Strengths: I'm a tactician, the sit-back-and-observe kind, but I would fight myself where I deemed others couldn't be trusted to do it correctly I'm good at Physics and Chemistry and Maths, as well as Technology. (My drawing is shameful though ) Personality: Ask 8legos, I don't remember Anything else: Mmmmmmm, I don't trust anyone else to do a job correctly, so I just go somewhere else rather than stress out over what they are doing
So, write me in when/if you feel like it. Ask me if you want anything else
Your quite a bit like me, I'm about 5'6" but I'm close to done growing. And I also don't have any physical strength.
As for critique, I love the story, but the formatting is a tad messy. There are paragraph breaks in the middle of sentences, and conversations are lumped together in an imposing block of text. It would be easier to read if you could clean it up.
Great story, though!
I saw it! it was good. I;ll write you in soon, though possibly not in this story about the castle.
Sorry about that! It spazzed on me with that one chapter. I'm trying to make it easy to read.
Thank you!
I'm not sure if this is related to your problem, but when you copy and paste onto here, it does often add extra lines between paragraphs. I usually fix that by editing it as soon as I post it.
