Post by MockingbirdInc on Jun 30, 2018 11:49:04 GMT
Here are some deleted sequences and concepts from the story.
Plip. Plop. The sugar cubes dropped into the tea cup. They sank down and hit the bottom of the tea cup. Tiny flakes of sugar arose from the cubes, swimming about. Twisting, twirling, spreading across the cup. A large spoon dived into the cup, and started mixing around. The sugar flakes were flinging around the most wildly, quickly disappearing into the hot tea. The remains of a cube were crushed, sending sugar flakes, large and small, exploding everywhere amongst the tea cup. Slowly, bit by bit, the flakes disappeared, and nothing could be seen but tinted brown tea. The tea cup was raised. Wu took a sip of the tea, and felt it soothing his thought and calming his insides. All the cold air leaking into the house and his body disappeared making him feel more relaxed. The healthy herbs helped loosen up Sensei’s sore bones. It had been a tiring day with harsh weather. (Sensei didn’t care that his tea was historically inaccurate. It tasted better this way.)
The tall oak doors of the temple swung open as Nya walked out, holding a cardboard box full of – “Hey, what’s that?!” She interjected, interrupting my description.
CONCEPT: In the original idea of the story, Andrew turned evil, and stole the ninja’s powers to create a final battle which would determine the fate of Ninjago. In the midst of the battle, the ninja would convince him to go back to good, in which case Andrew would have to undo what he’d done. I now realize Andrew isn’t the type of character to do such a thing, so of course, I changed it. I think somebody commented something about it being funny if Andrew found some way to get revenge on the ninja for them laughing at him during the “training” sequence, but I didn’t respond, due to not wanting to spoil the story.
CONCEPT: I considered Wu and Andrew going on a perilous journey to find Chamille to discover more about Andrew’s heritage.
Can I just say, going through this story again, my lack of realization for what was appropriate for a story almost made my complete overuse of all-caps, something which you aren't allowed to do in formal writing, not worth noting.
A lot of you guys started reading this on the Galleries, where pictures accompanied each part. I finally have photos for every part, so now . . . . . . The Young Warrior Picture Book! With my own commentary of what the pictures look like. (Story spoilers for those of you who haven't finished yet.)
The wind whistled across the snowy cavern, shaking the trees violently, making them bang angrily against the door. The freezing cold howled, crying for the doors to open so they could consume their victim. Yet inside, comfort and warmth abounded, as steam rose peacefully from a blue orientally-decorated cup of tea. Wu took a sip of the tea, and felt it soothing his thought and calming his insides. All the cold air leaking into the house and his body disappeared making him feel more relaxed. The healthy herbs helped loosen up Sensei’s sore bones. It had been a tiring day with harsh weather. (Sensei didn’t care that his tea was historically inaccurate. It tasted better this way.) Lloyd still required more training for him to be the full Green Ninja. Sensei Wu was tired with trying to train him. He was the destined Green Ninja, he was more powerful than any of the other ninja, and yet he still slacked off and seemed to not care. Lloyd’s training was always very halfhearted. He would rather loaf around and read comic books rather than become the most powerful living being of today.
The other ninja didn’t seem to like Lloyd too much. They still respected that he was to be incredibly powerful, but they didn’t appreciate having another ninja on the team, especially one who was still in elementary.
“Waaaaaaaaahhh! WaaaaAAAaaahh!”
Wu took another sip of his tea. The wind was howling like the cry of a baby. “Waaahhhh!” “WaaaaaaAAAAaaaaaahhhhh!” Sensei paused. It WAS the cry of a baby! Sensei put down his tea and hurriedly ran to his door. He opened it, and a cold, chilling gust of wind hit him. Snowflakes flew into his room, and the air started stinging his cheeks. He ran across the deck of the Destiny’s Bounty and stopped to listen for the noise. “WaaaaAAaaahhh!” He ran to the port side and hopped over. “Waaaahhh!” Sensei Wu looked down under him, and saw something. It was a baby, wrapped up in orange cloths inside a basket. Wu looked around him. Nobody was to be seen for miles away. Well, at least as far as he could tell, the snow and mist was making it hard to see.
Wu looked down at the baby. Its cheeks were red and rosy, and his nose was dripping terribly. It was shivering so hard, and looked on the verge of “The Deep Sleep”.
Wu immediately took pity on the baby, and hurriedly picked it up and took it to his room. Its face was very cold to the touch. Wu took some of the loose cloth and wrapped it around the poor baby’s cold head.
When he was done, the head covering happened to look like another ninja mask. Was it destiny? Did this happen because this baby was to become a ninja one day? Wu shook the thought away. It was probably because of all the years he spent tying Ninja masks. The baby looked pleased. Wu picked up the baby and put it in his soft, cushy bed. He covered the baby with a bit of his blanket. A bit more warmth couldn’t hurt.
The baby looked very content, and started drifting off to sleep. Wu walked to his personal restroom to the bath. He turned on the faucet for hot water, and it splashed out. As the water rose, Wu had to wonder how the Destiny’s Bounty had plumbing. Once a sixth of the bathtub was filled, he turned off the faucet. He walked back to his bed and picked up the baby. The baby seemed a bit annoyed Wu had disturbed his sleep. Kneeling down by the bathtub, Wu unwrapped the baby’s cloths and placed him in the bathtub. The baby looked happy and mild interested inside the tub. The rosy chill from his cheeks was slowly fading away.
After a few minutes, Wu took the baby out of the bath and placed him on the bathmat. He took a towel and tried off all the water. Wu returned the baby to his bed, and the baby returned to sleep, looking much happier.
Wu started walking over to the Ninja’s shared bedroom, preparing to announce the new arrival. “I hope Lloyd will grow up soon.” said a voice. It was Kai, from inside the room. “I know, right?” that voice was Jay. “I’m sick of little tike crawling around the place!” Zane spoke next. “Technically speaking, he is eight years old, and he can walk on his two f-” “Yeah, yeah.” Cole interrupted. “All I can say is, Sensei had better not burst in here announcing we have another child to look after. ‘Introducing; the Yellow Ninja! Sure, he’s only two years old, but he’ll be great one day!’” Kai snickered. “Yeah, that’d be bad.”
Wu decided that he was no longer going to introduce them to the baby. Maybe he should wait for another time. Several days later, Lloyd was finally an adult. Somehow the Ninja had become children, and it was up to Wu to get some aging tea to bring them back, but Lloyd grew up as well. Wu asked how it happened, but the ninja seemed very embarrassed about the subject and avoided the topic. (However, Jay said something about a dinosaur.) Wu thought that perhaps now was the time to announce to the ninja their new arrival. Wu walked over to their bedroom, but before he walked in he heard them talking through the door again. “Whew! I’m so glad Lloyd has grown up!” Kai said.
“I know, right?” Jay asked. “His personality seems to be changing a bit. In fact, it’s hard to believe he’s the little Lloyd Garmadon that attacked the village with Serpentine so he could get candy.”
Wu pressed his ear against the door in attempt to hear more, but a voice suddenly frightened him.
“Are you spying on them?” It asked. He quickly spun around to see Lloyd staring at him, concerned. Trying to save his pride, he wiped the door with his hand and said: “Okay, the door is working well. I was afraid it, uh, wasn’t working.” He walked away quickly, and Lloyd just gazed at him suspiciously. He finally shrugged, turned around and walked into the bedroom.
For the next several months, Wu considered breaking the news to them, but Cole’s pessimistic voice echoed in his head, which made him decline. He did a great job at keeping the baby a secret. However, the ninja did wonder why there was an occasional scrap of orange cloth in the laundry and why Wu’s robes sometimes smelled like rotten apples. Once Lloyd’s mother, Misako, an old and close friend of Wu’s, joined the group, he decided to let her in on the secret. She did a decent job at hiding the baby as well.
It was when Sensei Garmadon returned that Wu realized he couldn’t keep the baby a secret forever. He wanted to tell the ninja about the toddler, but couldn’t bring it upon himself, so he sent the child to a daycare for most of the day and eventually a boarding school.
The child stayed a secret for quite a while, but one day, the secret was finally released. This child was not a normal kid. This child was an elemental master.
There's the first part of my story! First off, I'd like to apologize; the writing's a bit weak. This was written months ago, and looking back on it, a lot of the sequences were clichè and the dialogue doesn't sound correct. As I said, this was written months ago. (Except for the first paragraph; which I just wrote, because I didn't like the original beginning.) Second, I'd like to mention that I will be finishing this story. I've been working on this since January, and although I'm not as inspired as I used to be, I will not let this be one of those stories where the author loses interest and ditches it. Third, I'd like a bag of marshmallows, 'cause they're good. Finally, I'd like to mention I've already written the first fourteen chapters, which will be released every day or two. Once I've caught up with what I've already written, chapter will take a week or two before they're published, so hang with me. However, if you want to "moar" and pressure me to write more, the process may speed up a bit. Are your pants on fire? I hope you enjoy the story! i initially tried to cut this but mobile
I just noticed - "snowy CAVERN?" What on earth is the Bounty doing in a cavern?!
A lot of you guys started reading this on the Galleries, where pictures accompanied each part. I finally have photos for every part, so now . . . . . . The Young Warrior Picture Book! With my own commentary of what the pictures look like. (Story spoilers for those of you who haven't finished yet.) welp itsa title card
the only thing bigger than his chair is his anger at teh boi
teh boi meets sum guys who have lotsa powers
teh boi is gunna eat sum really lumpy oatmeal
teh boi is on a bed but was cut in half; he rly happy bout it tho
teh boi's hed was glued 2 da bed
all smiles and giggles (:
teh boi is laffing at dat outdated technology
mommy sez hes a big boi
teh boi meets sans in person
the old guy sez he should starting pointing at doggos
self-explanatory
teh boi's frends got sum of those cool contacts dat change ur eye culur
teh boi doesnt like the contacts ):
teh boi stares at teh majestik pan of wisdum
mocks basically just bragging about his sets
they get a brickin dragun ride but dont like it ;-;
teh boi gets a nice new hat while everybody else fights over the remote
GREEN TEA?! I SAID I LIKED PEPPERMINT!!(╯°□°)╯彡┻━┻
pure beauty
everybodys getting battle gear so they can fight the cat
teh boi gets an even nicer hat
teh boi decides to also fight 4 teh remote instant regret
teh boi is vandalizing a squirrel mansion
rip larry teh lobster 2017 - 2017
everybodys afraid of teh green smoke
teh boi wunders if he should return the property to the rightful owner prob not
teh boi will win the fight over the remote with the power of cNADY BARS
teh boi got stuck in sum cuffs and he died his hair to show his true emotions regarding the event
teh boi is breaking teh s p e e d l i m i t
( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
teh bois gunna hit his hed :0
teh boi thot insted of hitting his hed he should hav a birthday party
( Very hyped! I've been waiting for a very long time for this. Me and my sister were very concerned about the plot when we found it out about a year ago, but now we're not as worried now we saw the trailer. Plus we've watched all the episodes of the show series which is all cannon to the movies, so yeah very excited! I honestly think you'd really enjoy the show series, especially Race to the Edge. )
(That's awesome! I hope you'll love the movie! Ooh, I'm still considering watching that, though with the way my summer looks, I may not have a lot of time. Lemme see if they have it on Netflix. . . *looks* *pumps fists* YAS. )
A lot of you guys started reading this on the Galleries, where pictures accompanied each part. I finally have photos for every part, so now . . . . . . The Young Warrior Picture Book! With my own commentary of what the pictures look like. (Story spoilers for those of you who haven't finished yet.) welp itsa title card
the only thing bigger than his chair is his anger at teh boi
teh boi meets sum guys who have lotsa powers
teh boi is gunna eat sum really lumpy oatmeal
teh boi is on a bed but was cut in half; he rly happy bout it tho
teh boi's hed was glued 2 da bed
all smiles and giggles (:
teh boi is laffing at dat outdated technology
mommy sez hes a big boi
teh boi meets sans in person
the old guy sez he should starting pointing at doggos
self-explanatory
teh boi's frends got sum of those cool contacts dat change ur eye culur
teh boi doesnt like the contacts ):
teh boi stares at teh majestik pan of wisdum
mocks basically just bragging about his sets
they get a brickin dragun ride but dont like it ;-;
teh boi gets a nice new hat while everybody else fights over the remote
GREEN TEA?! I SAID I LIKED PEPPERMINT!!(╯°□°)╯彡┻━┻
pure beauty
everybodys getting battle gear so they can fight the cat
teh boi gets an even nicer hat
teh boi decides to also fight 4 teh remote instant regret
teh boi is vandalizing a squirrel mansion
rip larry teh lobster 2017 - 2017
everybodys afraid of teh green smoke
teh boi wunders if he should return the property to the rightful owner prob not
teh boi will win the fight over the remote with the power of cNADY BARS
teh boi got stuck in sum cuffs and he died his hair to show his true emotions regarding the event
teh boi is breaking teh s p e e d l i m i t
( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
teh bois gunna hit his hed :0
teh boi thot insted of hitting his hed he should hav a birthday party
Here are some deleted sequences and concepts from the story.
Plip. Plop. The sugar cubes dropped into the tea cup. They sank down and hit the bottom of the tea cup. Tiny flakes of sugar arose from the cubes, swimming about. Twisting, twirling, spreading across the cup. A large spoon dived into the cup, and started mixing around. The sugar flakes were flinging around the most wildly, quickly disappearing into the hot tea. The remains of a cube were crushed, sending sugar flakes, large and small, exploding everywhere amongst the tea cup. Slowly, bit by bit, the flakes disappeared, and nothing could be seen but tinted brown tea. The tea cup was raised. Wu took a sip of the tea, and felt it soothing his thought and calming his insides. All the cold air leaking into the house and his body disappeared making him feel more relaxed. The healthy herbs helped loosen up Sensei’s sore bones. It had been a tiring day with harsh weather. (Sensei didn’t care that his tea was historically inaccurate. It tasted better this way.)
The tall oak doors of the temple swung open as Nya walked out, holding a cardboard box full of – “Hey, what’s that?!” She interjected, interrupting my description.
CONCEPT: In the original idea of the story, Andrew turned evil, and stole the ninja’s powers to create a final battle which would determine the fate of Ninjago. In the midst of the battle, the ninja would convince him to go back to good, in which case Andrew would have to undo what he’d done. I now realize Andrew isn’t the type of character to do such a thing, so of course, I changed it. I think somebody commented something about it being funny if Andrew found some way to get revenge on the ninja for them laughing at him during the “training” sequence, but I didn’t respond, due to not wanting to spoil the story.
CONCEPT: I considered Wu and Andrew going on a perilous journey to find Chamille to discover more about Andrew’s heritage.
Can I just say, going through this story again, my lack of realization for what was appropriate for a story almost made my complete overuse of all-caps, something which you aren't allowed to do in formal writing, not worth noting.
Ooh interesting. I had no idea you had those other ideas in mind. I'm glad you went with the storyline you did though.
The wind whistled across the snowy cavern, shaking the trees violently, making them bang angrily against the door. The freezing cold howled, crying for the doors to open so they could consume their victim. Yet inside, comfort and warmth abounded, as steam rose peacefully from a blue orientally-decorated cup of tea. Wu took a sip of the tea, and felt it soothing his thought and calming his insides. All the cold air leaking into the house and his body disappeared making him feel more relaxed. The healthy herbs helped loosen up Sensei’s sore bones. It had been a tiring day with harsh weather. (Sensei didn’t care that his tea was historically inaccurate. It tasted better this way.) Lloyd still required more training for him to be the full Green Ninja. Sensei Wu was tired with trying to train him. He was the destined Green Ninja, he was more powerful than any of the other ninja, and yet he still slacked off and seemed to not care. Lloyd’s training was always very halfhearted. He would rather loaf around and read comic books rather than become the most powerful living being of today.
The other ninja didn’t seem to like Lloyd too much. They still respected that he was to be incredibly powerful, but they didn’t appreciate having another ninja on the team, especially one who was still in elementary.
“Waaaaaaaaahhh! WaaaaAAAaaahh!”
Wu took another sip of his tea. The wind was howling like the cry of a baby. “Waaahhhh!” “WaaaaaaAAAAaaaaaahhhhh!” Sensei paused. It WAS the cry of a baby! Sensei put down his tea and hurriedly ran to his door. He opened it, and a cold, chilling gust of wind hit him. Snowflakes flew into his room, and the air started stinging his cheeks. He ran across the deck of the Destiny’s Bounty and stopped to listen for the noise. “WaaaaAAaaahhh!” He ran to the port side and hopped over. “Waaaahhh!” Sensei Wu looked down under him, and saw something. It was a baby, wrapped up in orange cloths inside a basket. Wu looked around him. Nobody was to be seen for miles away. Well, at least as far as he could tell, the snow and mist was making it hard to see.
Wu looked down at the baby. Its cheeks were red and rosy, and his nose was dripping terribly. It was shivering so hard, and looked on the verge of “The Deep Sleep”.
Wu immediately took pity on the baby, and hurriedly picked it up and took it to his room. Its face was very cold to the touch. Wu took some of the loose cloth and wrapped it around the poor baby’s cold head.
When he was done, the head covering happened to look like another ninja mask. Was it destiny? Did this happen because this baby was to become a ninja one day? Wu shook the thought away. It was probably because of all the years he spent tying Ninja masks. The baby looked pleased. Wu picked up the baby and put it in his soft, cushy bed. He covered the baby with a bit of his blanket. A bit more warmth couldn’t hurt.
The baby looked very content, and started drifting off to sleep. Wu walked to his personal restroom to the bath. He turned on the faucet for hot water, and it splashed out. As the water rose, Wu had to wonder how the Destiny’s Bounty had plumbing. Once a sixth of the bathtub was filled, he turned off the faucet. He walked back to his bed and picked up the baby. The baby seemed a bit annoyed Wu had disturbed his sleep. Kneeling down by the bathtub, Wu unwrapped the baby’s cloths and placed him in the bathtub. The baby looked happy and mild interested inside the tub. The rosy chill from his cheeks was slowly fading away.
After a few minutes, Wu took the baby out of the bath and placed him on the bathmat. He took a towel and tried off all the water. Wu returned the baby to his bed, and the baby returned to sleep, looking much happier.
Wu started walking over to the Ninja’s shared bedroom, preparing to announce the new arrival. “I hope Lloyd will grow up soon.” said a voice. It was Kai, from inside the room. “I know, right?” that voice was Jay. “I’m sick of little tike crawling around the place!” Zane spoke next. “Technically speaking, he is eight years old, and he can walk on his two f-” “Yeah, yeah.” Cole interrupted. “All I can say is, Sensei had better not burst in here announcing we have another child to look after. ‘Introducing; the Yellow Ninja! Sure, he’s only two years old, but he’ll be great one day!’” Kai snickered. “Yeah, that’d be bad.”
Wu decided that he was no longer going to introduce them to the baby. Maybe he should wait for another time. Several days later, Lloyd was finally an adult. Somehow the Ninja had become children, and it was up to Wu to get some aging tea to bring them back, but Lloyd grew up as well. Wu asked how it happened, but the ninja seemed very embarrassed about the subject and avoided the topic. (However, Jay said something about a dinosaur.) Wu thought that perhaps now was the time to announce to the ninja their new arrival. Wu walked over to their bedroom, but before he walked in he heard them talking through the door again. “Whew! I’m so glad Lloyd has grown up!” Kai said.
“I know, right?” Jay asked. “His personality seems to be changing a bit. In fact, it’s hard to believe he’s the little Lloyd Garmadon that attacked the village with Serpentine so he could get candy.”
Wu pressed his ear against the door in attempt to hear more, but a voice suddenly frightened him.
“Are you spying on them?” It asked. He quickly spun around to see Lloyd staring at him, concerned. Trying to save his pride, he wiped the door with his hand and said: “Okay, the door is working well. I was afraid it, uh, wasn’t working.” He walked away quickly, and Lloyd just gazed at him suspiciously. He finally shrugged, turned around and walked into the bedroom.
For the next several months, Wu considered breaking the news to them, but Cole’s pessimistic voice echoed in his head, which made him decline. He did a great job at keeping the baby a secret. However, the ninja did wonder why there was an occasional scrap of orange cloth in the laundry and why Wu’s robes sometimes smelled like rotten apples. Once Lloyd’s mother, Misako, an old and close friend of Wu’s, joined the group, he decided to let her in on the secret. She did a decent job at hiding the baby as well.
It was when Sensei Garmadon returned that Wu realized he couldn’t keep the baby a secret forever. He wanted to tell the ninja about the toddler, but couldn’t bring it upon himself, so he sent the child to a daycare for most of the day and eventually a boarding school.
The child stayed a secret for quite a while, but one day, the secret was finally released. This child was not a normal kid. This child was an elemental master.
There's the first part of my story! First off, I'd like to apologize; the writing's a bit weak. This was written months ago, and looking back on it, a lot of the sequences were clichè and the dialogue doesn't sound correct. As I said, this was written months ago. (Except for the first paragraph; which I just wrote, because I didn't like the original beginning.) Second, I'd like to mention that I will be finishing this story. I've been working on this since January, and although I'm not as inspired as I used to be, I will not let this be one of those stories where the author loses interest and ditches it. Third, I'd like a bag of marshmallows, 'cause they're good. Finally, I'd like to mention I've already written the first fourteen chapters, which will be released every day or two. Once I've caught up with what I've already written, chapter will take a week or two before they're published, so hang with me. However, if you want to "moar" and pressure me to write more, the process may speed up a bit. Are your pants on fire? I hope you enjoy the story! i initially tried to cut this but mobile
I just noticed - "snowy CAVERN?" What on earth is the Bounty doing in a cavern?!
Here are some deleted sequences and concepts from the story.
Plip. Plop. The sugar cubes dropped into the tea cup. They sank down and hit the bottom of the tea cup. Tiny flakes of sugar arose from the cubes, swimming about. Twisting, twirling, spreading across the cup. A large spoon dived into the cup, and started mixing around. The sugar flakes were flinging around the most wildly, quickly disappearing into the hot tea. The remains of a cube were crushed, sending sugar flakes, large and small, exploding everywhere amongst the tea cup. Slowly, bit by bit, the flakes disappeared, and nothing could be seen but tinted brown tea. The tea cup was raised. Wu took a sip of the tea, and felt it soothing his thought and calming his insides. All the cold air leaking into the house and his body disappeared making him feel more relaxed. The healthy herbs helped loosen up Sensei’s sore bones. It had been a tiring day with harsh weather. (Sensei didn’t care that his tea was historically inaccurate. It tasted better this way.)
The tall oak doors of the temple swung open as Nya walked out, holding a cardboard box full of – “Hey, what’s that?!” She interjected, interrupting my description.
CONCEPT: In the original idea of the story, Andrew turned evil, and stole the ninja’s powers to create a final battle which would determine the fate of Ninjago. In the midst of the battle, the ninja would convince him to go back to good, in which case Andrew would have to undo what he’d done. I now realize Andrew isn’t the type of character to do such a thing, so of course, I changed it. I think somebody commented something about it being funny if Andrew found some way to get revenge on the ninja for them laughing at him during the “training” sequence, but I didn’t respond, due to not wanting to spoil the story.
CONCEPT: I considered Wu and Andrew going on a perilous journey to find Chamille to discover more about Andrew’s heritage.
Can I just say, going through this story again, my lack of realization for what was appropriate for a story almost made my complete overuse of all-caps, something which you aren't allowed to do in formal writing, not worth noting.
Ooh interesting. I had no idea you had those other ideas in mind. I'm glad you went with the storyline you did though.
I use all caps in writing all the time.
Yeah, I think the story ended out a lot differently than I intended, but I'm glad it did. Of course, if I had my way, I would've edited out more from those first ten chapters.
(Pro Tip: Count the amount of times Mock says "I" to realize how self-eccentric he is. )
I'm loving your chapter titles. 
Thanks. ![[derp]](http://storage.proboards.com/6672327/images/YqNTPqyQUocVMYXZgUAI.png)
Thanks. 
I've been waiting for a very long time for this. Me and my sister were very concerned about the plot when we found it out about a year ago, but now we're not as worried now we saw the trailer. Plus we've watched all the episodes of the show series which is all cannon to the movies, so yeah very excited! ![[h]](http://storage.proboards.com/6672327/images/k3cXEdyNkyw6aB9dHN1d.png)
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HA HA very nice! 
